Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 concrete examples and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “sky foods”). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I am passionate about photography. For example, I often photograph plants in my local park and dramatic cloud formations at sunset. I also capture textures and details like tree bark or rippling water to make my photos more interesting.

提案: Improve grammar and add a specific reason or example. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a linking phrase. Correct collocations (e.g., “points of interest”, “museums”).

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I love cityscapes and the cultural energy. For instance, I enjoy photographing historic architecture and lively street cafés, which provide interesting subjects and contrasts. Consequently, cities offer more variety for my photography than rural landscapes.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct and more precise. Give a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific details or examples and use linking words. Avoid repetition and finish the sentence properly.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has vibrant culture and varied natural scenery. For example, I love photographing the colorful festivals and coastal landscapes near my hometown, which I know well and can visit often. Therefore I usually choose local scenes for my photography.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because my hobby is photography, so I take pictures of different things like plants, sky foods and so many things.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because my hobby is photography, so I take pictures of many different things like plants, the sky, food, and so on.

Errors: 'sky foods' is incorrect word choice and pluralization; 'so many things' is informal and vague. Also 'the sky' needs the definite article. Suggestion: replace 'sky foods' with 'the sky' and 'food', use 'many different things' and 'and so on' for clarity and naturalness. Grammar problems addressed: word choice affecting noun form and article use (IDs: 22 and 13).

× I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy cityscapes and vibrant cultural life. Urban areas have different interest in architecture, cafes and museum which makes them more attractive to me than rural landscapes.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy cityscapes and vibrant cultural life. Urban areas have different points of interest in architecture, cafes, and museums, which make them more attractive to me than rural landscapes.

Errors: 'different interest' is wrong noun phrase; use 'different points of interest' or 'varied interests'. 'museum' should be plural 'museums' to match 'architecture, cafes'. The relative clause 'which makes' must agree with the plural subject 'points of interest' so use 'which make'. Suggestion: use 'points of interest' and pluralize nouns and verbs to ensure agreement (Grammar problem types: 1 and 27 and 26).

× I prefer views in my own country because my country is full of colorful environment and beautiful nature and vibrant culture so I like to view in my.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because it is full of colorful environments, beautiful nature, and a vibrant culture, so I like to view places there.

Errors: awkward repetition 'my country' and incorrect noun phrase 'colorful environment' (use plural or 'a colorful environment'); 'like to view in my' is ungrammatical and missing the object; should use 'view places there' or 'see them there'. Also add articles: 'a vibrant culture'. Suggestion: use pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition, correct noun forms and add appropriate object to 'view' (Grammar problem types: 12, 22, 26).