Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tự nhiên và ý tưởng rõ ràng, nhưng cần rút ngắn và sắp xếp câu mạch lạc hơn, tránh ngập ngừng (umm) và lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp (A photography person -> a photography person). Nên thêm một câu ngắn giải thích cụ thể lý do để làm câu trả lời đầy đủ hơn, dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

例: No, I don't really take many photos. I prefer experiencing a place directly rather than through a camera because it helps me remember the atmosphere and emotions better. For example, when I visit a mountain, I focus on the sounds and smell instead of taking pictures.

提案: Ý chính rõ ràng và cụ thể, nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (rural views makes -> rural views make) và câu hơi dài. Nên chia thành hai câu để tự nhiên hơn và thêm một miêu tả cụ thể về cảnh vật để tăng độ chi tiết.

例: I definitely prefer rural views because they are peaceful and less crowded than cities. For instance, a quiet lake or a field of rice paddies helps me relax and clear my mind after a busy week.

提案: Ý trả lời hợp lý nhưng có một số vấn đề: cấu trúc câu thiếu trôi chảy, có ngập ngừng (uh) và một số lỗi ngữ pháp/diễn đạt (for uh to realize how beautiful and different place). Nên diễn đạt ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ, và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể cho cả hai lựa chọn.

例: It depends. If I want comfort and familiarity, I prefer views in my own country because they feel personal and meaningful. But if I'm seeking new experiences, I choose foreign places to discover different landscapes and cultures, such as visiting the coastal cliffs in Portugal.

× No, not really. To be honest, I'm not much of A photography person.

✓ No, not really. To be honest, I'm not much of a photography person.

Incorrect capitalization and article usage: 'A photography person' should be 'a photography person' but better is 'a photography person' with lowercase a; however the more natural phrase is 'a photography person' or 'a photographer'. Use lowercase for the article and 'a' not 'A'. Suggest replacing with 'a photographer' or 'a photography person' for naturalness. (Note: Following instructions, explanation is in English.)

× ...and rural views makes me feel relaxed and clear my mind after just by contemplating it.

✓ ...and rural views make me feel relaxed and clear my mind just by contemplating them.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun number: 'rural views' is plural so the verb should be 'make', not 'makes'. Also 'it' should match plural 'views', so use 'them'. Word order: 'just by contemplating them' is more natural than 'after just by contemplating it'. Suggest: 'rural views make me feel relaxed and clear my mind just by contemplating them.'

× But when I want something new, I would like to go abroad for uh to realize how beautiful and different place.

✓ But when I want something new, I would like to go abroad to see how beautiful and different places are.

Awkward structure and missing words: 'for uh to realize how beautiful and different place' is ungrammatical. Use infinitive 'to see' and plural 'places' with copula 'are'. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggest: 'go abroad to see how beautiful and different places are.'

× I would prefer experiencing a place in the moment rather than seeing it through a camera lens, so if I can, I try to keep it in my mind instead.

✓ I prefer experiencing a place in the moment rather than seeing it through a camera lens, so if I can, I try to keep it in my mind.

Tense and modal consistency: 'I would prefer experiencing' and 'so if I can, I try' mixes conditional and simple present. Use simple present 'I prefer' to match habitual action. Also 'instead' at end is redundant after 'rather than' and 'keep it in my mind' already conveys the idea. Suggest: 'I prefer experiencing... so if I can, I try to keep it in my mind.'

× I would like to choose my own country because it is more personal and meaningful to me.

✓ I would choose my own country because it is more personal and meaningful to me.

Modal verb usage and word choice: 'would like to choose' is not wrong but unnecessary in this habitual/contextual preference; 'would choose' or 'I prefer my own country' is more natural. The preposition 'to' after 'meaningful' is correct as used. Suggest simplifying to 'I would choose my own country' or 'I prefer my own country.'