Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct grammar (use present simple: 'I often take', not 'taking'), avoid slight redundancy ('beautiful moments and scenery' is fine but can be sharper), and keep sentences concise (max 5). Add one specific detail to make your answer more vivid (e.g., a memorable photo or camera type). Use a linking word when giving the example (e.g., 'for example').

例: Yes, I often take photos of different scenes because I like to capture beautiful moments. For example, when I travel I photograph coastal landscapes and bustling market streets; I usually share my best shots with friends and store them in a digital album.

提案: Fix grammar and word choice (plural/singular and articles): 'urban areas' and 'tall buildings' and avoid repeated words ('beautiful beautiful'). Start with a clear topic sentence stating preference or neutrality, then give two specific contrasting details using linking words ('for example', 'on the other hand').

例: I don’t have a strong preference because both offer different appeals. For example, urban areas have tall buildings and vibrant neon-lit streets, while rural areas offer quiet coastlines and wide-open fields where I can relax.

提案: Avoid awkward phrasing ('types of fields') and be consistent with the question (compare own country vs other countries). Provide a clear topic sentence answering whether you prefer local or foreign views, then support with specific examples and a linking word ('however' or 'on the other hand').

例: I don’t really prefer one over the other; both local and foreign views can be special. For instance, in my country I enjoy the familiar skyline and neon-lit streets, but when I travel abroad I like discovering different coastal landscapes and countryside scenes that feel new and peaceful.

× 'Yes, I often taking photos of different scenes because I like to capture beautiful moments and scenery.'

✓ 'Yes, I often take photos of different scenes because I like to capture beautiful moments and scenery.'

'taking' is incorrect after the adverb 'often'; the correct form is the base verb 'take' for simple present habitual actions. Suggestion: use simple present 'I often take' to show a regular habit.

× 'In urban area there are more tall building and beautiful neons on the streets.'

✓ 'In urban areas there are more tall buildings and beautiful neon signs on the streets.'

'urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' to match the general comparison; 'building' must be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'more'; 'neons' is unnatural—use 'neon signs' or 'neon lights' and keep plural to match context. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns and use natural collocations like 'neon signs'.

× 'However, in rural area there are many beautiful beautiful scenery such as the coastline.'

✓ 'However, in rural areas there is much beautiful scenery, such as the coastline.'

'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' for a general statement, or keep singular with article 'in the rural area'. 'scenery' is an uncountable noun, so use 'much scenery' or 'many beautiful places' instead of 'many ... scenery'. Also remove the duplicate word 'beautiful'. Suggestion: use uncountable noun rules or change to 'places'/'views' if you need a countable form.

× 'I think both types of fields have their strengths.'

✓ 'I think both types of places have their strengths.'

'fields' is semantically odd here—'places' or 'areas' fits better when contrasting urban and rural views. This is a word choice issue linked to present-tense opinion; keep simple present 'think' and replace 'fields' to match meaning. Suggestion: use 'places' or 'areas' to clearly refer to urban and rural locations.

× '...and the neon lights along the busy streets because they feel lively and modern, while in rural areas, I prefer the peaceful countryside and coastal landscape, which is relaxing and closer to nature.'

✓ '...and the neon lights along the busy streets because they feel lively and modern, while in rural areas I prefer the peaceful countryside and the coastal landscape, which are relaxing and closer to nature.'

'coastal landscape' refers to one of multiple things paired with 'countryside'; using 'the' before 'coastal landscape' makes it parallel with 'the peaceful countryside'. Also 'which is relaxing' should agree in number with the compound subject 'the countryside and the coastal landscape', so use 'which are relaxing'. Suggestion: keep parallel articles and ensure subject-verb agreement in following relative clauses.