Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır fakat birkaç hata ve gereksiz tekrar var. Tutarlılığı artırmak için daha kısa, net bir konu cümlesi kullanın, ardından gerekirse bir sebep veya kısa örnek ekleyin. Dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin (ör. "that interest" → "that" veya "that hobby"; "twin Brother" → "twin brother"). Ayrıca maksimum 3–4 cümleyle sınırlayın.

例: No, I don't really enjoy taking lots of photos. I prefer experiencing the moment rather than photographing it. However, my twin brother Ali loves photography and often takes many pictures when we travel.

提案: Cevap belirsiz ve dilbilgisel hatalar içeriyor (ör. "the silence in the." eksik tamamlayıcı). Ayrıca çelişkili ifadeler: "urban areas are more popular" ve "due to the view and the silence" — genelde kırsal alanlar daha sessizdir. Daha açık bir konu cümlesi kurun ve bir veya iki destekleyici neden ekleyin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak mantığı güçlendirin.

例: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the architectural views and the convenience of shops and cafés. However, I also appreciate quiet corners in the city where I can relax after a busy day.

提案: Cevap çok karışık, dilbilgisi ve kelime kullanımı hatalı (ör. "Uproar" mu kastediliyor? "kinda make me to feel that emotions" yanlıştır). Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlayın (kendi ülkeniz mi yoksa yurt dışı mı?), sonra net bir neden verin ve bir kısa örnek ekleyin. Basit, doğru cümle yapıları ve uygun kelimeler kullanın.

例: I prefer views in other countries because new places often create strong memories and emotions for me. For example, when I visited Spain I took many photos of the lively streets, and looking at them later brings back those happy feelings.

× No, I don't like taking a lot of pictures. I'm not into that interest that much, but my twin Brother Ali is passionate about it.

✓ No, I don't like taking a lot of pictures. I'm not very interested in that, but my twin brother Ali is passionate about it.

The phrase 'into that interest' is incorrect; use 'interested in' to describe a person's liking. 'That much' is awkward after this structure; 'very' is a natural adverb. 'Brother' should be lowercase unless used as a name. Suggestion: say 'I'm not very interested in that' or 'I'm not into it' for natural English.

× I think urban areas are more popular and I prefer urban areas more due to the view and the silence in the.

✓ I think urban areas are more popular, and I prefer them because of the views and the quiet.

The original ends with an incomplete prepositional phrase 'in the.' This is a sentence structure error. Also 'urban areas' repeated is redundant; use a pronoun. 'Silence' is better expressed as 'quiet' and 'view' should be plural if referring generally. Suggestion: complete the thought and avoid repetition: 'I prefer them because of the views and the quiet.'

× I love taking a lot of fun photos from the Uproar because it's kinda make me to feel that emotions after the tour and I can open these pictures so I can feel the emotions after the tour of so abroad is better for me.

✓ I love taking lots of fun photos while abroad because they help me feel the emotions from the trip again, so I prefer taking photos abroad.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: 'from the Uproar' is unclear (likely wrong word) and 'it's kinda make me to feel that emotions' mixes verb forms incorrectly. Redundant phrases like 'so I can feel the emotions after the tour of' create confusion. Use a clear clause: 'photos while abroad' and 'they help me feel the emotions from the trip again.' Also use 'lots of' instead of 'a lot of' before a plural noun for style. Suggestion: simplify and use correct verb forms: 'they help me feel' not 'make me to feel.'