Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and natural: give a clear topic sentence then add a brief reason or example. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words if you add details (for example, because, so).

例: Not really. Recently I mostly take photos of my child because I want to capture memorable moments, for example their first steps and birthday parties.

提案: Start with a clear preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and simplify phrasing. Keep to 2–3 sentences and be coherent.

例: I prefer urban views because I live in the city now and enjoy the lively streets and modern architecture. For instance, I like photographing busy markets and tall buildings.

提案: Give a direct answer and follow with specific reasons and an example. Eliminate fillers and refine vocabulary (e.g., 'views' rather than 'reviews', 'photogenic places'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different cultures and landscapes. For example, I find Japan very photogenic, with its temples, cherry blossoms and unique urban scenes.

× Umm, lately I just, uh, take pictures mostly of my child.

✓ Umm, lately I have just been taking pictures mostly of my child.

The sentence refers to a recent, ongoing action; English commonly uses the present perfect continuous (have been + -ing) for actions that started in the past and continue to the present. Changing 'take' to 'have been taking' correctly shows the ongoing recent activity. Also place 'just' before 'been' or after 'have' for natural word order.

× It's hard to say for me.

✓ It's hard for me to say.

The original word order is awkward; standard English places 'for me' after 'hard' and before 'to say': 'It's hard for me to say.' This is not a tense error but a sentence structure/word order issue within present-tense context; restructuring makes it natural.

× I've been to both, or rather I've lived in both urban and rural areas, but I'd say the urban area as is it is where I'm living now.

✓ I've been to both, and I've lived in both urban and rural areas, but I'd say the urban area is where I live now.

Remove redundant 'or rather' and duplicate 'as is it is.' Use present simple 'I live now' to state current residence instead of 'I'm living now' which is acceptable but 'I live now' is more natural here. Also connect clauses clearly with 'and.' This corrects awkward phrasing and ensures consistent tense usage.

× Well, I choose to say I prefer reviews from the other country.

✓ Well, I'd say I prefer views from other countries.

'Choose to say' is awkward; 'I'd say' (I would say) is more natural for expressing preference. 'Reviews' is incorrect—context asks about 'views' (scenery). Also use plural 'other countries' when speaking generally. This fixes wrong word choice and pronoun/modal phrasing.

× Not that I don't like my own country, but it's just that I wanna see umm, international views.

✓ Not that I don't like my own country, but I just want to see international views.

Use formal 'want to' instead of informal 'wanna' in a test context. Remove filler 'it's just that' (optional) to make the sentence concise. This fixes informal/modal verb usage and makes the sentence appropriate for the context.

× Like in Japan they have a lot of umm, umm, photographic, uh, places.

✓ For example, in Japan there are many photographic places.

Replace 'Like' with 'For example' to introduce an example formally. 'They have' is less formal; 'there are many' is more appropriate when stating existence. 'Photographic places' is acceptable though 'photogenic places' might be better. Removing fillers improves fluency.