Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は簡潔で主題は明確ですが、文法の誤りと表現の自然さに改善の余地があります。まず“On the other hand”は対比表現でこの文脈には不適切です。代わりに“also”や“especially”を使い、具体的な理由や状況（いつ、どのように撮るか）を付け加えると良いです。発話は最大5文に収め、接続詞（for example, because, when）を使って論理的に展開してください。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of scenery from the train because I can capture changing landscapes quickly. I also especially like photographing mountains, as their shapes and textures look dramatic in different lights.

提案: 内容が不明瞭で語彙・文法の誤りが多いです。“pills”はおそらく“places”か“views”の誤り、単数・複数や冠詞の使い方も改善が必要です。まず明確に都市部を好むと述べ、その理由を1〜2点に絞り、接続詞（because, for example, also）で補足してください。具体例（高層ビルの夜景やストリートの光）を挙げると説得力が増します。

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the architecture and the way buildings are lit at night. For example, skyscrapers with illuminated windows and neon signs create interesting patterns that are great for photography.

提案: 文法や語順の誤り（"I prefer built in Brazil"など）を修正し、比較の基準を明確に述べてください。最初に直接的な応答（I prefer views in my country/other countries）を提示し、その後理由（自然環境、思い出、アクセスのしやすさ）を具体的に述べます。具体的な風景や撮影時の感情を付け加えると自然さが増します。

例: I prefer views in my country, especially in Brazil, because it has amazing forests and rivers. The lush landscapes and vibrant colours make me feel relaxed, and I often photograph waterfalls and dense forest scenes when I travel there.

× I prefer pills in urban areas.

✓ I prefer places in urban areas.

The student used the wrong word 'pills' which is a vocabulary error and causes sentence structure confusion. Use 'places' to refer to areas or locations. Also ensure subject-verb agreement is maintained: 'I prefer places in urban areas' is clear and grammatically correct. Suggestion: Learn common collocations (prefer + noun) and check that the noun fits the context (places, views, areas).

× I like watching the building and the light on the building.

✓ I like watching the buildings and the lights on them.

The original uses singular 'the building' and 'the light' which is unnatural when speaking about urban areas generally. Use plural 'buildings' and 'lights' or rephrase to 'the lights on the buildings'. Also use the plural pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'buildings'. Suggestion: When talking generally about many structures, use plural nouns and matching pronouns; for repeatable actions use plural form.'

× Other areas there are a lot of.

✓ There are a lot of other areas.

Original sentence is a fragment and has incorrect word order for existential 'there are' construction. The correct order is 'There are a lot of other areas.' Suggestion: For existence or quantity use 'There is/There are' followed by the noun phrase, ensure proper word order 'There are + quantity + noun.'

× I prefer built in Brazil.

✓ I prefer places built in Brazil.

The phrase 'I prefer built in Brazil' lacks a noun after 'prefer' and uses 'built' without an object; it's unclear. Adding 'places' creates a clear object, and 'built in Brazil' describes them. Alternatively 'I prefer buildings in Brazil' or 'I prefer places in Brazil.' Suggestion: Ensure 'prefer' is followed by a noun or gerund and use proper noun phrases: 'prefer + noun' or 'prefer + verb-ing'. Use 'built' as an adjective only when modifying a noun.'

× Brazil has great forests and rivers.

✓ Brazil has great forests and rivers.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× It makes me feel better.

✓ They make me feel better.

Refers back to 'forests and rivers' (plural), so the verb should agree with plural subject: 'They make me feel better.' Suggestion: Check pronoun reference: use 'they' for plural antecedents and ensure verb agreement after pronoun.'

× I like taking pictures of the natural.

✓ I like taking pictures of nature.

'The natural' is not idiomatic English. Use the noun 'nature' to refer to natural environments. Also, no article is needed: 'pictures of nature.' Suggestion: Learn common nouns for environments: 'nature', 'the natural world', 'natural scenery'; choose the correct form depending on context.'