Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct grammar (take → taking/take pictures), and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if you give additional detail.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos in different places because I love travelling. For example, I like photographing landscapes and candid shots of myself in traditional dresses when I visit new towns.

提案: Answer the question directly (urban or rural), remove vague fillers, and give a specific reason with one or two supporting details. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and finish the sentence clearly.

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy nature and quiet surroundings. For instance, I often go to the mountains to hike and take photos of valleys and lakes, which helps me relax.

提案: Give a direct answer (own country or other countries), avoid unclear words and repetition, and provide specific examples of places or features that you like. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail and eliminate filler sounds.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has a wide variety of natural scenery. For example, we have high mountains, rolling hills and clear lakes that are perfect for photography and visiting.

× Yes, I really like to take a picture in uh, different places because I like to travel and taking pictures of me in beautiful dress.

✓ Yes, I really like to take pictures in different places because I like to travel and take pictures of myself in beautiful dresses.

The sentence mixes the base verb form 'to take' with the gerund 'taking' incorrectly. According to the list, this is a Verb + -ing form error. Use parallel verb forms after 'and' (take pictures ... and take pictures) or use gerunds consistently. Also use the reflexive pronoun 'myself' when the subject and object are the same, and plural 'pictures' and 'dresses' for general statements. Suggestion: Keep verbs parallel (take ... and take) and use appropriate pronouns and plural nouns.

× Yes, I prefer because I like a nature and peaceful environment. I like to travel in mountains and the peaceful place where I. Etcetera.

✓ Yes, I prefer it because I like nature and peaceful environments. I like to travel to the mountains and to peaceful places.

The original uses 'a nature' which is incorrect; 'nature' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. 'Peaceful environment' should be plural when speaking generally. 'Travel in mountains' is not the correct preposition; use 'travel to the mountains'. This fits the Incorrect use of quantifiers and preposition issues; here primary error is quantifier/article misuse. Suggestion: Use uncountable nouns without 'a' (like 'nature') and plural forms for general preferences ('peaceful environments'). Use correct prepositions ('travel to the mountains').

× I like to travel in mountains and the peaceful place where I. Etcetera.

✓ I like to travel to the mountains and to peaceful places.

The fragment 'the peaceful place where I. Etcetera.' is incomplete and ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error: missing object/complement and incorrect preposition. Make the sentence complete and parallel: 'travel to the mountains and to peaceful places.' Suggestion: Finish ideas and keep parallel structure when listing preferences.

× I prefer bills in my 1 country because my country is so beautiful and my country, uh, world, uh, world. Big mountains and beautiful hills, beautiful lakes and umm, beautiful places.

✓ I prefer places in my country because my country is so beautiful, with big mountains, beautiful hills, lakes, and other lovely places.

The phrase 'I prefer bills in my 1 country' seems to use incorrect words ('bills', '1') and is unclear; likely intended 'places in my country'. This is an Incorrect use of pronouns/words and general word choice error; per the provided list the closest match is incorrect use of pronouns/words. Also avoid repetition 'my country' and 'world'. Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'places' and concise phrasing: 'I prefer places in my country because it has big mountains...'. Replace vague fillers and repeated words.