Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors, repetition and irrelevant information. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid odd or irrelevant phrases (e.g., "nutritious man").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph city skylines and park landscapes, then print my favorite photos to hang on my wall. This hobby helps me relax and remember special places.

提案: Your response repeats phrases and lacks clear reasoning and coherent linking. Give a direct answer first, then one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: I prefer urban views because I like the energy and architecture of cities. For instance, I enjoy photographing busy streets and modern buildings, which often provide interesting shapes and lighting.

提案: The answer should directly address the question and include clearer, more specific details. Begin with a concise topic sentence, then give examples and a reason using linking words (e.g., "because," "for example"). Avoid vague phrasing like "many of you."

例: I prefer views in my own country because there are many famous and beautiful sites to photograph. For example, I love taking pictures of the Golden Temple and the Pink City in Jaipur, since their colors and architecture are unique.

× Yes, I like taking picture from the different view because my hobbies is clicking click picture and printed and a Co hanging on my room because I'm a very nutritious man.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because my hobby is taking and printing pictures and hanging them in my room because I am a very nostalgic person.

Errors: 'picture' and 'view' should be plural (singular/plural issue); 'hobbies is' uses plural noun with singular verb (subject-verb number mismatch) and should be singular 'hobby is' (singular/plural issue); 'clicking click picture' is redundant and ungrammatical — use 'taking pictures'; 'printed and a Co hanging on my room' is incorrect structure and articles — correct to 'printing pictures and hanging them in my room' (singular/plural and article use); 'nutritious man' is the wrong adjective meaning — should be 'nostalgic person' or another intended trait (word choice). Suggestion: ensure countable nouns use correct singular/plural forms and match verbs, remove redundancy, and choose appropriate adjectives for intended meaning.

× Yes, I like taking picture from the different view because my hobbies is clicking click picture and printed and a Co hanging on my room because I'm a very nutritious man.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because my hobby is taking and printing pictures and hanging them in my room because I am a very nostalgic person.

Error: 'nutritious man' is an incorrect adjective choice; 'nutritious' describes food, not a person. Use an adjective that matches intended meaning (for example, 'nostalgic', 'creative', or 'artistic'). Suggestion: pick adjectives appropriate to the context and ensure they modify the correct noun.

× Yes, I like taking picture from the different view because my hobbies is clicking click picture and printed and a Co hanging on my room because I'm a very nutritious man.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because my hobby is taking and printing pictures and hanging them in my room because I am a very nostalgic person.

Error: 'taking picture from the different view' should use 'taking pictures of different views' — use 'of' to indicate what is being photographed and pluralize both nouns. Also 'on my room' should be 'in my room'. Suggestion: use 'of' with 'taking pictures' and use 'in' to indicate location inside a room.

× I prefer only urban area because the person of urban area are very kindness and soft hearted in the urban, in the rural, in the urban area, in the urban area. Very peaceful.

✓ I prefer urban areas because people in urban areas are very kind and soft-hearted; they are peaceful.

Errors: 'I prefer only urban area' — 'area' should be plural 'areas' when speaking generally (singular/plural). 'the person of urban area are' is incorrect: 'people in urban areas are' matches plural subject with plural verb. 'very kindness' should be adjective 'kind' not noun 'kindness'. Suggestion: ensure nouns and verbs agree in number and use correct adjective forms.

× I prefer only urban area because the person of urban area are very kindness and soft hearted in the urban, in the rural, in the urban area, in the urban area. Very peaceful.

✓ I prefer urban areas because people in urban areas are very kind and soft-hearted; they are peaceful.

Errors: 'person of urban area' uses wrong preposition — use 'people in urban areas'. Repetition 'in the urban, in the rural...' is confusing; use clear contrast if needed. Suggestion: use 'in' for location and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× Yes, I prefer my own country because in my country very very places are to watch many of you in my country like Golden Temple, Jaipur, Pink City, etcetera.

✓ Yes, I prefer my own country because there are many places to visit in my country, such as the Golden Temple and Jaipur (the Pink City).

Errors: 'very very places are to watch' is ungrammatical and misordered; 'places' is plural but sentence structure wrong. Use 'there are many places to visit' (there be structure + plural noun). Also 'many of you in my country' is incorrect pronoun use. Suggestion: use 'there are' to introduce existing places and 'to visit' instead of 'to watch'.

× Yes, I prefer my own country because in my country very very places are to watch many of you in my country like Golden Temple, Jaipur, Pink City, etcetera.

✓ Yes, I prefer my own country because there are many places to visit in my country, such as the Golden Temple and Jaipur (the Pink City).

Error: Missing 'there are' to state existence — use 'There are many places' for existence of multiple places. Suggestion: use 'there is/there are' to introduce existence and follow with correct infinitive 'to visit'.

× Yes, I prefer my own country because in my country very very places are to watch many of you in my country like Golden Temple, Jaipur, Pink City, etcetera.

✓ Yes, I prefer my own country because there are many places to visit in my country, such as the Golden Temple and Jaipur (the Pink City).

Error: 'many of you in my country' incorrectly uses 'you' when referring to places; pronoun should not be used here. Suggestion: remove incorrect pronoun and name or describe the places directly.