Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、直接，并避免犹豫或多余的填充词。可以先用一句主题句明确立场，然后用一到两句具体说明原因或例子，保持句子简短完整，避免重复“pictures/sceneries”。发音上注意连贯性与停顿控制。

例: I don't usually take many photos, but I sometimes photograph particularly beautiful or meaningful scenes, such as sunsets or family gatherings, to remember those moments.

提案: 回答要有更清晰的结构：先明确偏好，然后给出具体原因和一两个细节支持。注意语法（e.g., 'more attractive' 而不是 'more attracting'），避免句尾不完整或拖沓。用连词连接原因和例子。

例: I prefer rural areas because I live in a busy city and enjoy the peace and natural landscapes in the countryside, such as wide fields and quiet walking paths.

提案: 减少填充词（uh, umm），并使用正确表达（'foreign countries' 而非 'foreigner countries'）。先给出明确立场，然后说明具体原因并举例说明差异。结尾要完整，不要中断句子。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer landscapes and cultural scenes that are quite different from what I'm used to, for example, coastal cliffs in Portugal or terraced rice fields in Southeast Asia.

× Actually, I'm not a big fan of taking pictures, but sometimes I really do take some pictures of special sceneries.

✓ Actually, I'm not a big fan of taking pictures, but sometimes I really do take pictures of special scenery.

句中“take some pictures of special sceneries”有两处问题：一是“some pictures”可以简化为“pictures”更自然；二是“sceneries”不可数，正确用法为“scenery”。建议：scenery作为不可数名词，表示风景时不要加复数；必要时用形容词或量词（e.g. beautiful scenery, some scenes）。

× I prefer rural areas actually because I'm living in urban city so I think rural scenery is more attracting for me and.

✓ I prefer rural areas actually because I live in an urban city, so I think rural scenery is more attractive to me.

原句问题包括：1) “I'm living”在此描述长期居住应使用一般现在时“I live”而非现在进行时（符合时态一致性，参见问题类型6）；2) “urban city”冗余，应使用“an urban city”或仅“the city”或“an urban area”；3) “more attracting for me”用法不当，应为“more attractive to me”。建议：描述长期事实用一般现在时；形容词“attractive”后接介词“to”。

× I prefer rural areas actually because I'm living in urban city so I think rural scenery is more attracting for me and.

✓ I prefer rural areas actually because I live in an urban city, so I think rural scenery is more attractive to me.

该句中“attracting for me”是介词搭配错误，应使用形容词“attractive”并搭配介词“to”（attractive to someone）。同时“in urban city”缺少冠词，正确为“in an urban city”或更自然“in the city”。建议：注意形容词与介词搭配，并正确使用冠词。

× I actually prefer use uh in other countries because I think umm, foreigner uh, countries sceneries are more attractive and uh, different from my.

✓ I actually prefer views in other countries because I think foreign countries' scenery is more attractive and different from mine.

原句问题：1) “prefer use uh in other countries”结构混乱，应为“prefer views in other countries”或“prefer to visit other countries”；2) “foreigner countries”应为“foreign countries”（形容词错误）；3) “sceneries”不可数，改为“scenery”；4) 结尾“different from my”缺少名词，正确为“different from mine”。建议：去填充语填词，使用正确形容词形式和所有格代词，注意不可数名词scenery的用法。

× I actually prefer use uh in other countries because I think umm, foreigner uh, countries sceneries are more attractive and uh, different from my.

✓ I actually prefer views in other countries because I think foreign countries' scenery is more attractive and different from mine.

句中“foreigner”是名词，错误用作形容词，应使用形容词“foreign”。另外“more attractive and different”后应明确比较对象，用“different from mine”。建议：注意名词与形容词的区分，使用正确形式。