Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is enthusiastic and relevant, but has several grammatical errors, awkward phrasing and redundancy. Make your response more natural by using correct verb forms, removing repeated ideas, and keeping it concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Also add a brief specific example to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of interesting views. I usually take pictures of sunsets and city skylines to keep as memories on my phone. For example, last month I photographed a colorful sunset at the beach and I look at that photo whenever I need to relax.

提案: Your answer addresses both options but is unclear and contains grammar mistakes and confusing contrast. State your preference clearly in one sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'while') to make it coherent. Avoid repeating words and use correct noun forms and adjectives.

例: I prefer rural scenery because it feels more natural and peaceful, with plenty of greenery. While urban areas have impressive tall buildings and interesting architecture, the countryside helps me relax and enjoy nature.

提案: Your answer gives a clear opinion but contains grammar and vocabulary errors and could be more specific. Express the idea with correct tense and articles, and add a concrete reason or brief example to support your preference. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'since') to connect ideas.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I have already seen many places in my own country. For instance, I would like to visit Japan to photograph its unique temples and cherry blossoms, which are very different from the scenery at home.

× I love picturing everything that I think is wonderful and spectacular because I would love them to keep kept in my phone as a memory.

✓ I love picturing everything that I think is wonderful and spectacular because I would love them to be kept in my phone as memories.

Used a wrong verb form 'keep kept' instead of passive past participle with 'be' + past participle. Use 'to be kept' for passive and 'memories' (plural) to match 'everything' referring to multiple items. Suggestion: use 'to be kept' for passive constructions and ensure plural nouns match context.

× And be able to look them later.

✓ and be able to look at them later.

Missing main verb and incorrect verb pattern: 'look them' is incorrect; correct prepositional verb is 'look at'. Also sentence fragment lacking subject; attach to previous clause with 'and'. Suggestion: use 'look at them later' and connect it to previous sentence or supply a subject and verb.

× It depends, but I prefer the scenery in rural area because it's more close or natural and more greenery and it makes me feel unwind.

✓ It depends, but I prefer the scenery in rural areas because it's closer to nature, there is more greenery, and it helps me unwind.

Several issues: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' (quantifier/number), 'more close' is incorrect comparative — use 'closer to nature', 'more greenery' needs a clause 'there is more greenery' for clarity, and 'feel unwind' is wrong form — use 'helps me unwind' or 'makes me feel relaxed'. Suggestion: use correct comparative forms and complete clauses, and prefer 'unwind' as verb with a helping verb like 'helps'.

× But in the country, in the urban area is a more tall building and it's really really beautiful.

✓ But in the city there are taller buildings, and they can be really beautiful.

Awkward structure and article errors: 'in the country, in the urban area' is mixed and unclear. Use 'city' for urban area. 'is a more tall building' is wrong comparative order — use 'taller buildings' and plural agreement 'there are'. Also 'really really' is informal repetition; one 'really' suffices. Suggestion: choose consistent terms (city/ countryside), use correct comparative adjective order and subject-verb agreement.

× I strongly prefer the view in other country because I went through my country in lots of place and I already seen them, but I would love to travel to other country to see a more different view.

✓ I strongly prefer the views in other countries because I have been around many places in my country and I have already seen them, but I would love to travel to other countries to see different scenery.

Multiple errors: 'view in other country' should be plural 'views in other countries' to match general preference (quantifier/number). 'I went through my country in lots of place' is unidiomatic — use 'I have been around many places in my country'. 'I already seen them' uses wrong tense/form — use present perfect 'have already seen them'. 'a more different view' is redundant; use 'different scenery' or 'a different view'. Suggestion: use plural forms for general statements, correct perfect tense for experienced actions, and avoid redundant modifiers.