Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 중복되고 어색한 표현(예: "I I", "make you make me")과 불필요한 말(예: 'uh')이 있습니다. 문장 구조를 간단히 정리하고 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 시작 문장으로 명확한 주제를 말한 뒤, linking word로 이유를 연결하고 구체적 예시를 하나 덧붙이면 자연스럽습니다. 발음/유창성 면에서는 망설임을 줄이고 한 문장당 최대 2-3개의 세부사항으로 제한하세요.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and mountain scenes so I can revisit those memories later.

提案: 문법적 오류(주어-동사 일치, "mountains view", "peacefully landscapes")와 어색한 표현을 고치세요. 비교 문장을 명확히 하고, linking word(예: "because", "so", "while")를 사용해 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 세부 묘사를 하나 추가해 답변을 풍부하게 하되 전체 문장은 3~4문장 이내로 유지하세요.

例: I prefer rural views because they make me feel relaxed and peaceful. For instance, mountain landscapes and open fields calm me more than busy city scenes. Also, I enjoy the fresh air and quiet when I visit the countryside.

提案: 의미 전달은 되지만 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다(예: "more more", "my countries", "are very facilities familiar"). 'familiar'의 이유를 구체적으로 설명하고 비교를 명확히 하세요. 또한 한두 개의 구체적 이유나 예시를 들어 답변을 설득력 있게 만드세요.

例: I prefer landscapes in other countries because they feel novel and different from what I'm used to at home. For example, I find European old towns and Asian coastal scenery interesting because they have different architecture and cultural elements I'm not familiar with.

× I like taking pictures of various views because I I, when I want to remember that, uh, taking picture make you make me memorize the landscapes.

✓ I like taking pictures of various views because when I want to remember them, taking pictures helps me memorize the landscapes.

The original sentence has pronoun errors and awkward phrasing. 'I I' is a repetition and should be removed. 'that' is vague; use 'them' to refer to 'various views' (pronoun agreement). 'taking picture make you make me memorize' is ungrammatical; use 'taking pictures helps me memorize' (correct verb form and structure). Use plural 'pictures' to match 'various views'. Suggestion: remove filler words, use clear pronouns that agree in number, and use 'help(s) + base verb' for this meaning.

× I like rural areas views because it makes me feel refreshed and mountains view or peacefully landscapes makes me feel peace more peaceful than urban city view.

✓ I like rural areas' views because they make me feel refreshed, and mountain views or peaceful landscapes make me feel more peaceful than urban city views.

This sentence has pluralization and possessive issues. Use 'rural areas' views' or better 'views of rural areas'; 'it makes' is incorrect because the subject is plural ('views') so use 'they make'. 'Mountains view' should be 'mountain views' (plural noun form), and 'peacefully landscapes' is incorrect adjective form — use 'peaceful landscapes'. Also 'urban city view' should be plural 'urban city views' to compare correctly. Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs agree in number and use correct adjective forms.

× I like other countries landscapes more more than my countries because my countries landscapes are very facilities familiar for me but other city view is not.

✓ I prefer landscapes in other countries more than those in my country because the landscapes in my country are very familiar to me, but the views of other cities are not.

Multiple plural and possessive errors: 'other countries landscapes' should be 'landscapes in other countries' or 'other countries' landscapes' and avoid double 'more more'. 'my countries' should be 'my country' (singular) or 'my country's'. 'are very facilities familiar' is incorrect — 'familiar' does not take 'facilities'; use 'very familiar to me'. 'other city view is not' should be 'the views of other cities are not'. Suggestion: use consistent singular/plural forms and correct collocations like 'familiar to someone' and rephrase for clarity.