Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, correct small grammar slips, and make answers more specific and varied. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating words (e.g., 'I actually I'), and give 1–2 concise specific examples with brief reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'for instance' or 'also').

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes. I usually take photos whenever I notice something visually striking; for instance, I like capturing trees with dramatic light because their shapes change with the seasons, and I also photograph street scenes to record everyday life and interesting architecture.

提案: Provide a complete, grammatically correct response and avoid trailing off. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., 'I don't have a strong preference'), then support with 2 brief specific reasons using linking words ('for example', 'moreover'). Correct pluralization and sentence structure ('their beauty', 'people's daily lives').

例: I don't have a strong preference between urban and rural views. For example, urban areas offer lively street scenes, architecture, and people’s daily activities, while rural areas provide peaceful natural landscapes and wide open skies, so I enjoy photographing both for different moods.

提案: Avoid repetition and finish your sentences. Give a clear topic sentence, then provide 1–2 specific contrasting details about home country vs abroad, using linking words ('however', 'for instance'). Fix awkward phrasing ('my own country is beautiful; it has many skyscrapers') and be concise.

例: I don't have a strong preference between photographing at home or abroad. For instance, my country has impressive skyscrapers and familiar cultural scenes, whereas other countries offer different architectural styles and customs, so I enjoy both because each offers unique photo opportunities.

× I actually I take pictures whenever I see something interesting or intriguing, whether it's in a good way or bad way.

✓ I actually take pictures whenever I see something interesting or intriguing, whether it is in a good way or in a bad way.

Error type: Sentence structure and repetition (map to ID 26). The phrase 'I actually I take' repeats the subject and creates an extra pronoun. Also 'it's in a good way or bad way' is missing consistent prepositions and articles. Suggestion: remove the extra 'I' and use parallel structure: 'whether it is in a good way or in a bad way.' Use full forms for clarity in spoken responses.

× For example, I take pictures of trees.

✓ For example, I take pictures of trees.

Although the sentence is grammatically correct, confirm plural 'trees' matches 'pictures of' (no change needed). No error from the provided list; left unchanged.

× Actually, I do not have have a preference in urban areas or rural areas.

✓ Actually, I do not have a preference for urban areas or rural areas.

Error types: repetition (sentence structure ID 26) and incorrect use of preposition/article (ID 11/22). The verb 'have' is duplicated. Use 'preference for' (correct preposition) rather than 'in'. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'have' and use 'preference for'.

× I think each of them has their beauties in their own.

✓ I think each of them has its own beauty.

Error types: incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and singular/plural agreement (ID 1). 'Each' is singular, so use singular possessive 'its' and singular noun 'beauty'. Also 'in their own' is incomplete; use the fixed phrase 'its own beauty.' Suggestion: match 'each' with singular forms.

× Like in urban areas you can observe St. streets, cars and People's Daily lives and As for rural areas, you can enjoy the nature there.

✓ In urban areas you can observe streets, cars and people's daily lives, and in rural areas you can enjoy nature there.

Error types: sentence structure (ID 26), incorrect capitalization and article usage (ID 22), and incorrect use of definite article (ID 17). 'St.' is unnecessary; 'streets' is sufficient. 'People's Daily lives' incorrectly capitalizes 'Daily' and uses an unnecessary definite article; use 'people's daily lives'. 'the nature' should be 'nature' without 'the'. Suggestion: use parallel clauses, correct capitalization, and omit unnecessary articles.

× So that's why I.

✓ So that's why I take pictures in both places.

Error type: sentence structure error (ID 26) — sentence is a fragment and incomplete. Provide a complete clause to express the intended idea. Suggestion: complete the thought, e.g., 'So that's why I take pictures in both places.'

× Like the previous question, I do not have a strong preference in my own country and other countries.

✓ Like the previous question, I do not have a strong preference between my own country and other countries.

Error types: incorrect preposition (ID 11) and sentence structure (ID 26). Use 'preference between' when comparing two options, or 'preference for' with one option. Suggestion: use 'between' to show comparison.

× There are different things to see in my own and the other countries.

✓ There are different things to see in my own country and in other countries.

Error type: sentence structure (ID 26) and omission. 'My own' is incomplete—needs 'country'. Also 'the other countries' is awkward; use 'other countries.' Suggestion: include missing noun and parallel prepositions for clarity.

× Like my own country is itself is beautiful like that many skyscrapers but also you can see.

✓ My own country is beautiful; it has many skyscrapers, but you can also see other kinds of scenery.

Error types: sentence structure errors (ID 26), repetition ('is itself is'), and word order problems (IDs 27/1). The original sentence repeats 'is' and lacks a clear end. Suggested correction removes repetition, provides correct verb forms ('has many skyscrapers') and completes the contrast with 'but you can also see...'. Suggestion: avoid repeating verbs, complete clauses, and use proper punctuation to separate ideas.