Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar; use a clear topic sentence, link reasons with connectors, and finish the example. Avoid filler sounds like “umm” and correct verb forms (e.g., “helps” not “helped”, “I tend to take” not “tend to taking”). Aim for 2–4 sentences, each coherent and specific.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. It helps me relax and clears my mind, and it also lets me remember places I visit. For example, when I travel I usually take many pictures of landscapes and local streets so I can look back and recall the trip.

提案: Good direct answer and clear reasons. To improve further, add a linking phrase and a specific example or brief comparison to make the response more vivid and slightly longer (while staying within 5 sentences).

例: I prefer views in rural areas because cities are often noisy and overcrowded, which I find stressful. In contrast, rural scenery is calm and peaceful, with open fields and quieter streets, so I usually choose the countryside when I want to relax.

提案: Clear answer with balance and a contrast connector. Improve by tightening language (avoid redundant phrases like “of course”) and adding a specific example of what you like at home vs abroad. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up there and the landscapes and traditions feel familiar and comforting. However, I would still like to travel abroad occasionally to experience different cultures and see unique landscapes, such as deserts or fjords, that we don’t have at home.

× Taking photographs is one of my hobbies because it's helped me to relax and clear my mind.

✓ Taking photographs is one of my hobbies because it helps me to relax and clear my mind.

The original uses present perfect 'has helped' (contracted as 'it's helped'), which conflicts with the present-tense general statement 'is one of my hobbies.' Use simple present 'helps' for habitual or general truths. Suggestion: use simple present when describing habits or regular effects (it helps me).

× Also it's helped me to remember the location that I have gone to.

✓ Also it has helped me remember the places I have been to.

Problems: contraction 'it's' ambiguous (it has) and word choice/order. 'Remember the location that I have gone to' is awkward — 'places' fits better, and 'have been to' is the correct present perfect form for visited locations. Also omit 'to' after 'helped' when followed by bare infinitive (helped me remember). Use 'has helped' or 'it has' spelled out for clarity.

× For example, when I travel UMM I tend to taking a lot of pictures just to.

✓ For example, when I travel, I tend to take a lot of pictures.

Error: after 'tend to' you must use the base form (infinitive without to? actually 'tend to' + base verb), so 'tend to take' is correct; 'taking' is incorrect. Also remove stray 'just to' which is incomplete. Add comma after 'travel' and remove 'UMM' filler.

× I prefer views in rural areas because cities are usually noisy and overcrowded, which I find stressful.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because cities are usually noisy and overcrowded, which I find stressful.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence is correct. Included here to show no change required.

× I like rural scenery because it is calm and peaceful.

✓ I like rural scenery because it is calm and peaceful.

Sentence is grammatically correct and uses simple present appropriately for general preference; no correction needed.

× Of course, I prefer the views in my own country because it's where I was born and raised, so everything feels familiar and comfortable.

✓ Of course, I prefer the views in my own country because it is where I was born and raised, so everything feels familiar and comfortable.

Main issue: contraction 'it's' is informal; expand to 'it is' for clarity. The tense 'was born and raised' is correct (past participle forms used in passive). No other change needed.

× However, if I have a chance, I would also like to travel abroad sometimes to see different landscapes and culture.

✓ However, if I have the chance, I would also like to travel abroad sometimes to see different landscapes and cultures.

Change 'a chance' to 'the chance' for natural collocation and specificity. 'Culture' should be plural 'cultures' when referring to different countries. The conditional 'if I have the chance, I would like' is appropriate.