Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Ngắn gọn câu chủ đề và sửa ngữ pháp; dùng liên từ để mạch lạc; cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Chỉnh thì và số ít/đếm được (ví dụ: "pictures", "views"); (2) Viết câu ngắn gọn tối đa 3–4 câu; (3) Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về loại ảnh bạn chụp và cảm xúc của bạn; (4) Dùng liên từ như "so", "because" hoặc "for example" để kết nối ý.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel, I usually capture landscapes, such as mountains and beaches, to remember the trip. For example, last month I photographed a sunrise over the sea and shared it with my family because it looked stunning and made me feel peaceful.

提案: Cải thiện: Sửa ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp và phát âm dẫn đến từ sai (như "Python"); dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng danh từ số nhiều/đúng: "rural views"; (2) Tránh lặp từ và sửa cụm từ sai thành "fresh air", "feel calm/relaxed"; (3) Dùng linking words như "because" và "for example"; (4) Giữ câu ngắn và rõ ràng.

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy being close to nature. For example, I love mountains, rivers and wide open skies, and the fresh air helps me feel calm and relaxed after a long day at work.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp rõ ràng (ưa thích cả hai hay một trong hai) và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không phù hợp. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + nguyên nhân + ví dụ; (2) Sửa các cụm sai: "both my country and others", "it has a lot of exciting places" -> "exciting places"; "chance to travel"; (3) Loại bỏ tiếng lắp và từ không cần thiết; (4) Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm trong/ngoài nước.

例: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad. I love Vietnam's landscapes, such as Ha Long Bay, but I also want to explore other countries because they offer different scenery and cultures. For instance, I hope to visit Japan to see cherry blossoms and compare them with the coastlines at home.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different view.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The nouns 'picture' and 'view' need plural forms to match 'taking' and 'different' indicating multiples. Use 'pictures' and 'views' to indicate more than one. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when referring to more than one (e.g., 'pictures', 'views').

× Apparently when I travel I capture the beautiful landscape special thing in this place and share on and share on social media with my friend and family.

✓ When I travel, I capture the beautiful landscapes and special things in each place and share them on social media with my friends and family.

The sentence needs present tense verbs and correct noun forms. Use 'landscapes' and 'special things' (plural). 'Share on and share on' is redundant; use 'share them on social media'. Also 'friend and family' should be 'friends and family'. Suggestion: simplify by using plural nouns and pronouns for things you share and ensure verbs agree with plural objects.

× I think it's a good way to give out memory.

✓ I think it's a good way to create memories.

'Give out memory' is unidiomatic. Use 'create memories' or 'preserve memories'. 'A memory' would be singular and not match the general idea. Suggestion: use collocations like 'create memories' or 'preserve memories'.

× I prefer rural view because I really enjoy being in nature.

✓ I prefer rural views because I really enjoy being in nature.

Use plural 'views' when speaking generally. 'Rural view' sounds like one specific view. Suggestion: use plural for general preferences: 'rural views'.

× For example I I like enjoy with mountain, river and open sky and flat air and it make me feel Python And more relaxed in the countryside after a long working hour.

✓ For example, I enjoy mountains, rivers, open skies and fresh air; they make me feel calm and relaxed in the countryside after a long working day.

Multiple issues: remove duplicated 'I', use correct verb form 'enjoy' without 'like' or combine as 'I like/enjoy'. Use plural nouns 'mountains, rivers, open skies'. 'Flat air' is incorrect—use 'fresh air'. 'It make' should be 'they make' to agree with plural subjects. 'Python And' is likely a typo; replace with 'calm'. 'Working hour' should be 'working day'. Suggestion: keep parallel noun list, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct collocations like 'fresh air' and 'working day'.

× Oh, I prefer board the view in my country and other country.

✓ Oh, I prefer broader views in my country and in other countries.

'Board the view' is incorrect; likely meant 'broader views'. Use plural 'views' and plural 'countries' for general reference. Also include 'in' before 'other countries'. Suggestion: use 'broader views' and plural forms when generalizing.

× I really love the beautiful landscape in Vietnam.

✓ I really love the beautiful landscapes in Vietnam.

When speaking generally about multiple scenes, use plural 'landscapes'. Alternatively, 'the beautiful landscape' could refer to the country's overall landscape, but plural is more natural here. Suggestion: use plural to refer to many places: 'beautiful landscapes'.

× However, I think it have a lot of exciting in other country for me to explore.

✓ However, I think there are a lot of exciting places in other countries for me to explore.

'It have' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and structure; use 'there are' for existence. 'A lot of exciting' needs a noun—use 'exciting places'. 'Other country' should be 'other countries'. Suggestion: use 'there are' + plural noun and pluralize 'countries'.

× So I I really want to have chain to travel, uh, travel more and recap the beautiful base.

✓ So I really want to have the chance to travel more and revisit the beautiful places.

'Have chain' is incorrect — use 'have the chance' or 'get a chance'. 'Recap the beautiful base' is unidiomatic; use 'revisit the beautiful places'. Remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: learn common noun phrases like 'have a chance' and verbs like 'revisit' for returning to places.