Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, fix verb agreement and use one or two specific supporting details with a linking word. For example, mention what about sunsets appeals (colour, mood) and give a short reason or example.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially sunsets. The warm golden light at dusk creates a calm atmosphere and makes colours richer, so I often wait on a hill to capture the skyline when clouds add texture.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then support with specific contrasts and one clear reason. Avoid vague phrases like “all same” and reduce fillers. Use linking words (because, whereas) and correct articles and plural/singular forms.

例: I prefer rural views because I grew up there and appreciate the unspoiled landscapes. For example, rural areas have quiet fields and diverse wildlife, whereas urban scenes often feel crowded and repetitive.

提案: Answer directly, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use a linking phrase to add a specific reason or example. Replace vague terms like “scenario” with concrete words (scenery, landscapes) and fix word order and article use.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it offers diverse natural scenery, such as mountains and coastal beaches. For instance, many tourists visit my region to see the dramatic coastline and national parks, which I think are unmatched.

× I enjoy taking the sunset pictures so it's because of the golden light which create the calm and relax environment for me.

✓ I enjoy taking sunset pictures because the golden light creates a calm and relaxed environment for me.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'golden light' is singular, so verb must be 'creates' (3rd person singular). 'the sunset pictures' unnecessary article; 'sunset pictures' is more natural. 'relax' should be the past participle adjective 'relaxed' to describe the environment. Also remove redundant 'so it's because of' and replace with 'because' for clarity.

× As a person who grew up in rural area, I love the natural beauty of rural area.

✓ As a person who grew up in a rural area, I love the natural beauty of rural areas.

Article and plural: 'rural area' needs the indefinite article 'a rural area' when referring to one area in general. When speaking generally about countryside, use plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area' depending on meaning. Here 'rural areas' fits the general idea of multiple rural places.

× Umm urban areas are all same but rural area have this peaceful and natural vibe.

✓ Umm urban areas are all the same, but rural areas have this peaceful and natural vibe.

Article and subject-verb agreement: 'all same' requires 'all the same'. 'rural area have' is incorrect because plural subject 'rural areas' requires verb 'have'. Also make both nouns plural for parallelism.

× Honestly, my own country because my country is rich in nature and also most of the people tourists are visiting my own country just to see the scenario.

✓ Honestly, my own country, because it is rich in natural beauty and many tourists visit my country just to see the scenery.

Pronoun and word order: Replace repetitive 'my country' with pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. 'rich in nature' is better expressed as 'rich in natural beauty'. 'most of the people tourists are visiting' is ungrammatical; correct to 'many tourists visit' or 'most tourists visit'. 'see the scenario' is incorrect word choice — use 'see the scenery' to mean landscapes.

× So yeah, I love my own country's view than others.

✓ So yeah, I prefer the views of my own country to those of others.

Comparison and sentence structure: Use 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'love X than Y'. Also 'my own country's view' is awkward; 'the views of my own country' is clearer. 'others' should be 'those of others' to refer to other countries' views.