Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use 'to remember' not 'to memory'), and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail using a linking word to support your idea. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like to remember places. For example, when I travel I always photograph landscapes so I can look back at the scenery later. I also try to capture interesting light or colors to make the photos more memorable.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and correct basic grammar (use plural forms and correct comparisons). Use a linking word to explain why and add a specific detail about what you like in rural areas. Keep sentences concise and natural.

例: I prefer views in rural areas, especially when I travel, because they feel more peaceful. For instance, after living in a big city my whole life, I enjoy wide open fields and quiet villages where the air is fresher and the scenery is calmer.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence and correct phrases (use 'views of other countries' and 'Switzerland' and 'before I die'). Combine short fragmented sentences into 2–3 fluent sentences and add one specific reason or detail about Switzerland.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different landscapes and cultures. For example, I would love to visit Switzerland before I die to see the snowy Alps and the picturesque lakes, which look beautiful in photos.

× It's mainly because I want to memory them by pictures.

✓ It's mainly because I want to remember them with pictures.

The verb 'memory' is a noun, not a verb; the correct verb is 'remember'. Also use the preposition 'with' to indicate the means (pictures). Suggestion: use 'remember' and 'with' to form 'remember them with pictures'. (Type 10)

× So if I go to travel I always take picture of landscape.

✓ So if I go traveling I always take pictures of landscapes.

'Travel' as a verb commonly forms a gerund 'traveling' after 'go'. 'Picture' and 'landscape' should be plural to match 'I always take' and general meaning. Use 'take pictures of landscapes'. (Type 1)

× I prefer rural area especially for travel.

✓ I prefer rural areas, especially when I travel.

Use plural 'rural areas' to refer to rural settings generally. Rephrase 'especially when I travel' for natural expression. (Type 1)

× I lived in urban area for all my life so I feel cooler area as.

✓ I have lived in urban areas all my life, so I feel cooler in rural areas.

Use present perfect 'have lived' for an experience continuing to now ('all my life'). 'Urban area' should be plural 'urban areas'. The clause 'I feel cooler area as' is ungrammatical: express sensation with 'I feel cooler in rural areas.' (Type 5)

× I like view of another country.

✓ I like views of other countries.

Use plural 'views' and 'other countries' to express a general preference. (Type 1)

× I really like the bit of Swiss.

✓ I really like Switzerland a little bit.

'The bit of Swiss' is ungrammatical. Use the country name 'Switzerland' and place 'a little bit' after the verb for clarity. Alternatively: 'I really like Switzerland.' (Type 26)

× My dream is travel to Swiss before dying.

✓ My dream is to travel to Switzerland before I die.

After 'My dream is' use the infinitive 'to travel.' Use the country name 'Switzerland' and a natural time clause 'before I die.' (This involves verb form and word choice; categorized as Verb in the past participle form is not exact, so treated as Sentence structure errors.) (Type 26)

× I like the snow.

✓ I like snow.

When speaking generally about snow as a substance or weather, omit the definite article 'the'. Use 'I like snow.' (Type 17)