Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng có vài lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và từ vựng lặp lại; cần rút gọn để không quá dài và sửa lỗi. Cụ thể: sửa cấu trúc “cities city skylines” thành “city skylines” hoặc “cityscapes”, bổ sung mạo từ và giới từ phù hợp (“a special trip”), và dùng liên từ để làm câu mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra cố gắng giữ tối đa 4-5 câu và tránh lặp ý.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos can preserve a moment. For example, I often take pictures of sunsets and city skylines to remember a special trip. Taking these photos helps me recall the atmosphere and emotions of that day.

提案: Câu trả lời rõ ràng và chứa lý do hỗ trợ nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và liên kết câu: thêm mạo từ và thì phù hợp (“a busy week”), dùng liên từ để nối ý (“so” hoặc “which helps me relax”), và tránh thông tin thừa. Có thể kết hợp câu để tự nhiên hơn và giữ số câu trong giới hạn.

例: I definitely prefer rural areas because I live in an urban area that is quite polluted and full of skyscrapers. I enjoy the scenery and greenery in the countryside, which help me relax after a busy week in the city. For example, I often go hiking on weekends to unwind.

提案: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng có một câu thừa (“Me.”) và một vài chỗ cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và mạch lạc: tránh câu ngắn rời rạc, kết hợp câu miêu tả bằng liên từ, và bổ sung mạo từ phù hợp (“the beaches bring back many happy memories”). Ngoài ra có thể nêu một ví dụ cụ thể để chi tiết hơn (một bãi biển hoặc kỷ niệm).

例: I haven't had a chance to visit other countries, so I prefer the views in my own country. Vietnam has many attractions, and I especially love the coastal scenery, with long sandy beaches and crystal-clear water. The beaches are easy to reach and always bring back happy memories of family trips.

× For example, I often take pictures of sunsets or cities city skylines to remember special trip.

✓ For example, I often take pictures of sunsets or city skylines to remember special trips.

The sentence has redundant and missing words. 'cities city skylines' repeats 'city' and should be 'city skylines'. Also 'special trip' needs an article or plural; in this context 'special trips' is more natural. Suggestion: remove duplicate word and use plural to match general habit.

× I definitely prefer rural areas because I live in an urban area which is quite polluted and full of skyscrapers.

✓ I definitely prefer rural areas because I live in an urban area which is quite polluted and full of skyscrapers.

No change necessary for grammar here; sentence is correct. (Included to show checked against the list.)

× I enjoy beautiful scenery and lots of greenery in the countryside and wide open fields help me relax after busy week in the city.

✓ I enjoy beautiful scenery and lots of greenery in the countryside, and wide open fields help me relax after a busy week in the city.

Missing article 'a' before 'busy week' and missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'and' that joins two independent clauses. Add 'a' to make the noun phrase correct and comma for clarity.

× For example, I often go hiking on the weekends.

✓ For example, I often go hiking on the weekends.

Sentence is grammatically correct and fits present habitual tense; no change needed. (Included to indicate it was checked.)

× I haven't had a chance to visit other countries, so I prefer the views in my own country.

✓ I haven't had a chance to visit other countries, so I prefer the views in my own country.

Sentence is grammatically correct: present perfect 'haven't had' indicates lack of experience and 'prefer' expresses current preference. No change required.

× Vietnam has many attractions to explore and I especially love the coastal scenery.

✓ Vietnam has many attractions to explore, and I especially love the coastal scenery.

Add comma before coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses for correct punctuation and clarity. Grammar content is correct.

× The long sandy shores and crystal clear water are really beautiful.

✓ The long sandy shores and crystal-clear water are really beautiful.

Hyphenate the compound adjective 'crystal-clear' when it precedes the noun. 'Water' can be singular in a general sense; no plural change required. Added hyphen for correct adjective form.

× Moreover, it's easy to travel there and beaches bring back many happy memories. Me.

✓ Moreover, it's easy to travel there, and the beaches bring back many happy memories for me.

Sentence fragment 'Me.' is incorrect. Combine clauses with 'and', add article 'the' before 'beaches' for specificity, and attach 'for me' rather than a standalone 'Me.' to form a complete, grammatical sentence.