Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and give a clearer topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundant short fragments like "Good vibes, good views." Also use slightly more precise vocabulary to explain why it makes you feel good (e.g., relaxed, inspired, nostalgic). Keep it to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me relax and sparks my creativity. For example, when I photograph a sunset I feel calm and inspired to edit the colours. Overall, taking pictures is a simple way for me to capture memories and improve my photography skills.

提案: Answer directly and accurately — the response is contradictory (urban described as natural). Correct the content and add a reason with a linking word. Use specific details about what you like in urban areas (architecture, lights, street life) or contrast with rural features if you meant those. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy city architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, I like photographing historic buildings and colourful markets, which feel energetic and full of detail.

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct and specific. State your preference clearly, then give one or two reasons with linking words and a short example. Avoid listing country names without context and correct pluralization ("other countries").

例: I prefer views in other countries because different cultures offer unique landscapes and architecture. For example, I love photographing shrines in Japan and vibrant street scenes in Mexico, which are very different from what I usually see at home.

× Yes, I like it because it makes me feel good. Good vibes, good views.

✓ Yes, I like it because it makes me feel good. Good vibes, good views.

No correction needed for tense or grammar. The sentence correctly uses present simple to express a general preference and result.

× I prefer urban areas because they are much relaxing and natural.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they are much more relaxing and natural.

The adjective 'relaxing' requires a comparative form when modified by 'much'. Use 'much more relaxing' to compare degree. 'Much relaxing' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'more relaxing' or 'much more relaxing' depending on emphasis.

× I prefer another countries because there's so much good looking countries in the world.

✓ I prefer other countries because there are so many good-looking countries in the world.

Several errors corrected: 'another countries' is wrong because 'another' partners with singular nouns; use 'other countries' for plural. 'There's' (there is) is singular; use 'there are' for plural subject 'countries' (subject-verb agreement). 'so much good looking countries' mixes quantifier and adjective forms: for countable plural use 'so many' and hyphenate 'good-looking' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggestion: 'other countries' and 'there are so many good-looking countries'.

× Example Japan, South Korea, UMM, America, United States, Puerto Rico, Mexico.

✓ For example: Japan, South Korea, the United States, Puerto Rico, and Mexico.

The fragment 'Example Japan...' is not a complete sentence; begin with 'For example' to introduce a list. 'America' is informal and ambiguous; use 'the United States' for clarity. Include the definite article 'the' with 'United States'. 'UMM' is unclear and seems filler; remove or replace with a specific country. Use commas and 'and' before the final item in the list. Suggestion: 'For example: Japan, South Korea, the United States, Puerto Rico, and Mexico.'