Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “I do like” repeated) and long run-on sentences. Use more precise vocabulary like “scenery,” “landscape,” or “scenic view.”

例: Yes — I enjoy taking photos of scenic views. For example, when I see a beautiful sunset or a lush landscape, I often take a photo on my phone to capture the moment. This helps me remember the place and share it with friends.

提案: Answer directly first (state preference or that you like both), then support with a concise personal example. Use linking words like “because” or “however” and avoid filler phrases (“you know”). Keep to two or three sentences maximum and correct grammar (e.g., “I lived in a village” not “I was living”).

例: I prefer rural views overall because they are quieter and more natural. For example, when I lived in a village as a child, I often rode my bicycle at sunrise and sunset and took many photos of the sky and fields.

提案: Give a clear direct response and briefly explain why. Avoid vague phrasing and small errors (e.g., “saying” should be “seeing”; use articles: “in another country”). Use one linking word and provide a short specific reason or example.

例: I don't have a strong preference between my own country and other countries when it comes to views. Whether I'm at home or abroad, I enjoy sunsets and sunrises the same way because they are universally beautiful and peaceful.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different sceneries whenever I see something very pretty and especially which is like very naturally beautiful, I do like taking the pictures and try to capture the moment through my phone.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different scenes whenever I see something very pretty, especially when it is naturally beautiful. I like taking pictures and try to capture the moment with my phone.

Use 'scenes' not 'sceneries' because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun (Grammar Problem Type IDs 1 and 22). Also simplify and split the long sentence for clarity. Replace 'which is like very naturally beautiful' with 'especially when it is naturally beautiful' to use correct relative clause and adjective/adverb order (IDs 12 and 13). Use 'with my phone' rather than 'through my phone' for more natural preposition use (ID 11). Suggestions: treat 'scenery' as uncountable ('the scenery' or 'beautiful scenery') or use 'scenes' for countable instances; avoid redundant phrases like 'which is like'.

× Well, I'm a product of both urban and rural area.

✓ Well, I'm a product of both urban and rural areas.

Use plural 'areas' because 'urban and rural' refer to two types of areas; count noun must agree (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Suggestion: match number when referring to multiple categories: 'urban and rural areas' or 'an urban area and a rural area'.

× When I was a kid growing up, I was living in a village with my family.

✓ When I was a kid, I lived in a village with my family.

Use simple past 'lived' rather than past continuous 'was living' for a habitual/state situation in the past (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). 'When I was a kid growing up' is redundant; simplify to 'When I was a kid'. Suggestion: use simple past for past facts or habitual past actions.

× So whenever I used to go out in the evening, you know, riding my bicycles and to enjoy sunsets and sunrise in the morning too, I did capture a lot.

✓ So whenever I used to go out in the evening, you know, riding my bicycle and enjoying the sunsets and sunrises in the morning too, I captured a lot of photos.

Several issues: 'riding my bicycles' should be singular 'riding my bicycle' if referring to one; 'to enjoy' should be parallel as '-ing' form 'enjoying' to match 'riding' (Verb + -ing form, ID 8). 'Sunset and sunrise' should be plural 'sunsets and sunrises' if habitual (ID 1). 'I did capture a lot' is awkward; use simple past 'I captured a lot of photos' (Past tense issue ID 5). Suggestion: keep parallel gerunds and consistent number and use 'photos' to clarify what was captured.

× I do like saying sunrise and sunset.

✓ I do like seeing sunrises and sunsets.

Use 'seeing' not 'saying' (incorrect verb choice; ID 26 sentence structure) and pluralize 'sunrises and sunsets' for habitual experiences (ID 1). Suggestion: choose correct verb collocations: 'see a sunrise/sunset', 'watch a sunrise/sunset'.

× It does not matter whether I'm living in my home country or whether I'm enjoying it in other country.

✓ It does not matter whether I'm living in my home country or enjoying it in another country.

Remove redundant 'whether' in second clause for parallel structure (Incorrect conjunction use ID 16). Use 'another country' with article 'another' (Article errors/Incorrect use of articles ID 22 and 17). 'Enjoying it in other country' is ungrammatical; 'in another country' is correct. Suggestion: keep parallel clauses and use appropriate articles: 'another country'.

× It's just a beautiful nature that attracts me a lot, so really doesn't matter.

✓ It's just beautiful nature that attracts me a lot, so it really doesn't matter.

Do not use the indefinite article 'a' with uncountable noun 'nature' (Article errors ID 22). Better to say 'beautiful nature' or 'the beauty of nature'. Also add subject 'it' in the second clause: 'so it really doesn't matter' (Sentence without a verb/structure errors ID 23 and 26). Suggestion: use 'nature' as uncountable and include the subject in the second clause for clarity.