Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid tense and word form errors (e.g., use 'landscapes' and 'capture'), and limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially landscapes. For example, I often photograph sunsets because wide landscapes capture the full sky and colors, which makes the photos more dramatic.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use a topic sentence stating your preference, then give one clear reason with a linking word. Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'wild' → 'wildlife' or 'atmosphere'). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban ones. This is because rural landscapes usually have unique wildlife and peaceful atmospheres, which give me energy and make my photos more interesting.

提案: Give a clear choice or say you like both, then give distinct reasons. Fix vocabulary and grammar ('prefer using' → 'prefer views in', 'wife' → 'feeling' or 'sense of home'). Use linking words to contrast reasons for each. Keep it concise and specific.

例: I like views in both my own country and abroad. In my own country I feel a strong sense of connection and familiarity, whereas views in other countries offer different cultures and atmospheres that inspire me.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially in landscape because it captured the whole sunset.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially landscapes because they capture the whole sunset.

The original uses 'in landscape' and 'it captured'. 'Landscape' should be plural or 'landscape photography'; 'it' is vague and singular though referring to 'views' or 'pictures', so use plural 'they capture'. Also past participle 'captured' suggests completed action; present simple 'capture' fits the habitual context. Suggestions: use 'landscapes' or 'landscape photos' and match subject and verb number: 'they capture'. Grammar problem type ID:9

× Yes I do I prefer views in urban areas or rural areas but the most time I focused on the views in rural areas cause rural area have a different type of wild that give me a positive energy and also making taking the picture of it.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer both urban and rural views, but most of the time I focus on rural views because rural areas have different wildlife that gives me positive energy and also make me want to take pictures of them.

This sentence has multiple structural problems: run-on combination without punctuation and mixed tenses. Corrections include punctuation ('Yes, I do.'), parallel structure ('both urban and rural views'), consistent present simple tense for habitual actions ('I focus', 'rural areas have', 'that gives'), correct noun 'wildlife' instead of 'wild', subject-verb agreement ('wildlife that gives'), and proper gerund structure ('make me want to take pictures' instead of 'making taking the picture of it'). Suggestions: break into shorter sentences, use consistent tense, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct noun forms. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I prefer use in my own country and other country also because in my own country it give me a positive wife and a connectivity with it and in other country it just give me a different type of vibe and just give me a positive vibe.

✓ Yes, I prefer both my own country and other countries because my own country gives me a sense of belonging and connection, and other countries give me a different kind of positive vibe.

Problems include incorrect pronoun and word choices: 'prefer use in' is ungrammatical; 'other country' should be plural 'other countries'; 'it give' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'positive wife' is a wrong word (likely 'positive vibe' or 'sense of life' — corrected to 'sense of belonging'); 'connectivity with it' is awkward, changed to 'connection'. Use plural for general reference ('other countries') and match verbs to subjects ('country gives'). Suggestions: use 'both' to indicate two options, use correct nouns ('connection', 'vibe'), and ensure subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID:27