Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, avoid second-person confusion ("you"), and limit to maximum five sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct articles, verb forms, and plural/singular agreement (e.g., "taking pictures is one of my favorite hobbies").

例: Yes, I do. Taking pictures is one of my favorite hobbies, and I often photograph landscapes. For example, I usually take photos at sunrise and sunset because the light is warm and it creates dramatic colors. This routine makes me feel relaxed and energised.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then provide one or two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and repetition. Use correct singular/plural and adjective forms ("rural areas have more aesthetic variety" or "rural areas are more peaceful"). Keep under five sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas. Rural areas are usually quieter and have more natural scenery, such as fields and old villages, which I find beautiful. Because of this peaceful atmosphere, I can focus more on composing my photos and enjoying the moment.

提案: Answer directly and then contrast preferences with clear linking words (e.g., "on the one hand... on the other hand"). Be specific about reasons and avoid repetition. Use correct plurals and article use ("other countries"). Limit to three sentences max for clarity.

例: I enjoy views both in my own country and abroad. On the one hand, local scenes are familiar and comforting, reminding me of home; on the other hand, I like visiting other countries to discover different landscapes and architectural styles, which inspire my photography.

× Yes, absolutely because taking picture of you is one of the most favorite hobby.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because taking pictures is one of my favorite hobbies.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match the general activity. 'Hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' when preceded by 'one of the' and referring to one among several. Also 'my' is needed to show possession. Improve by ensuring subject-activity nouns use correct singular/plural and include possessive where appropriate.

× I usually click pictures of the views every afternoon when the sunset and also in the sunrise because it gives me a positive vibes and a positive energy.

✓ I usually take pictures of views every afternoon at sunset and also at sunrise because they give me positive vibes and positive energy.

Use 'take pictures' rather than 'click' for more natural phrasing. 'The views' changed to 'views' for general reference. Use preposition 'at' with 'sunset' and 'sunrise'. 'Gives me a positive vibes' mixes singular verb with plural noun; change to 'they give me positive vibes' or 'it gives me positive energy'. Also article 'a' before 'positive vibes' is incorrect; remove or change to singular noun.

× Hmm I prefer views in usually rural areas because rural area have similar type of aesthetic aesthetic vibes and uh in I'm not going to just. And.

✓ Hmm, I usually prefer views in rural areas because rural areas have a similar type of aesthetic vibe.

Place adverb 'usually' before the verb phrase. Use plural 'areas' consistently and add 'a' with 'type' and use singular 'vibe' or plural 'vibes' without 'type of'. Removed incoherent fragment 'and uh in I'm not going to just. And.' Improve by ordering adverbs correctly and matching singular/plural forms.

× I prefer views in usually rural areas because rural area have similar type of aesthetic aesthetic vibes and uh in I'm not going to just. And.

✓ I usually prefer views in rural areas because rural areas have a similar type of aesthetic vibe.

The subject 'rural areas' is plural so the verb must be 'have' which is correct, but the original used 'rural area have' mixing singular and plural. Ensure noun forms match the verb: use 'rural areas have' or 'a rural area has'. Also remove duplicate word 'aesthetic'.

× That's very interesting question. I prefer to see views in my own country and other country also.

✓ That's a very interesting question. I prefer to see views in my own country and in other countries too.

Add indefinite article 'a' before 'very interesting question'. Use plural 'countries' when referring to other nations in general and add preposition 'in'. 'Also' changed to 'too' for natural placement.

× The reason why I want to see the views in my own country that is it gives me a positive vibes and the reason and the other reason why I would like to see the views in other country because I just want to see the views from different countries and the different type of views which give me positive.

✓ One reason I want to see views in my own country is that they give me positive vibes. Another reason I would like to see views in other countries is that I want to experience different kinds of views that make me feel positive.

Avoid redundant phrasing 'the reason why... that is'. Use 'they give me positive vibes' to match plural 'views'. Use plural 'countries' and 'kinds of views' for generalization. 'Which give me positive' is incomplete; use 'that make me feel positive'. Improve by simplifying sentence structure and ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct article usage.