Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用简洁且准确的句子直接回答问题，并修正词汇错误（如 meals → scenes/views），减少多余或重复的表达。可以先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持，避免语法错误和不必要的词汇。注意时态和冠词的使用（a/ the），以及常见搭配（take pictures of / post on social media）。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I like to capture memories. For example, when I travel I often photograph Mount Fuji and the surrounding scenery. I usually post the best photos on social media to share my experiences with friends.

提案: 回答要更自然，先直接说偏好，再用具体原因支持。注意语法（主谓一致、可数名词复数、形容词使用）和连词的衔接。用更恰当的词汇表达理由（relaxed atmosphere → a relaxed atmosphere; high building → tall buildings）。减少绝对化表述（only… therefore I feel very boring）。

例: I prefer rural areas because they have a relaxed atmosphere and are closer to nature, where I can see many animals like birds and deer. In contrast, cities have many tall buildings and a busier environment, which I find less peaceful.

提案: 明确回答并修正多处词汇和语法错误（meals → views; wheels → walks?／traditions?；other country → other countries）。回答应有主题句并给出具体原因或例子，避免重复和含糊的表达。可以说明想拍摄异国风景的原因并举一到两个具体例子。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel more novel and showcase different cultures. For instance, I would photograph temples in Japan or traditional markets in Thailand to capture cultural details that I don't usually see at home.

× Yes, I love taking picture of different meals because I would like to capture different memories in somewhere.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different places because I would like to capture different memories somewhere.

句中有多处错误：1) “taking picture” 名词复数应为 “taking pictures”（动名词短语后接可数名词时需复数或其它限定）。2) “different meals” 与语境不符，应该是“different places/ views”（单词选择错误）。3) “in somewhere” 不合语法，正确应为副词“somewhere”。改正后句子更符合英语习惯。建议：注意动名词后名词的单复数、选择与语境匹配的名词，以及副词与介词搭配的区别。

× For example, when I travel there, I will take some pictures with Fuji mountains.

✓ For example, when I travel there, I take some pictures of Mount Fuji.

原句时态和介词使用不自然：在一般现在时/习惯性动作表达（when I travel there）中，应使用现在时表习惯动作：“I take”。“with Fuji mountains” 中“with”不合适，常用介词是“of”或直接用地名“Mount Fuji”。同时“Fuji mountains” 用法不当，应为单一山名“Mount Fuji”。建议：表达习惯性行为时用一般现在时，注意地名和正确介词。

× Also, I will post those pictures in the social media to share with my friends and to talk about my traveling experiment.

✓ Also, I will post those pictures on social media to share with my friends and to talk about my travel experiences.

错误点：1) “post ... in the social media” 介词应为“on social media”，且通常不加定冠词“the”。2) “traveling experiment” 用词不当，应该是“travel experiences” 或 “my travels”。“experiment” 与旅行语境不符。改正后更自然。建议：熟悉常用介词搭配（post on social media），并选用与语境匹配的名词。

× I prefer rural areas because it can provide the relaxed atmosphere and also is close to the nature that I can see a lot of animals such as birds or dogs.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they can provide a relaxed atmosphere and are also close to nature, where I can see a lot of animals such as birds and dogs.

错误点：1) 主语“rural areas”为复数，但原句用了单数代词“it”与单数动词“can provide/ is”，应使用复数“they ... are”。2) “the relaxed atmosphere” 冠词使用过度，可改为“a relaxed atmosphere”。3) “close to the nature” 搭配错误，正确为“close to nature”。4) 连词和从句连接不自然，使用“where”更合适。建议：注意主谓一致，复数名词用复数代词/动词，学习固定搭配（close to nature）。

× However, urban areas only provide a lot of high building, therefore I feel very boring.

✓ However, urban areas only have a lot of tall buildings, so I feel very bored.

错误点：1) “provide a lot of high building” 语法和搭配错误，改为“have a lot of tall buildings”（名词复数和形容词顺序）。2) “therefore I feel very boring” 用词错误，应该是“I feel bored”（boring 表示令人感到无聊的人/事，bored 表示感到无聊的人）。3) 句子连接建议用“so”而不是“therefore”以使口语更自然。建议：区分形容词“bored/boring”，注意名词复数形式及形容词位置。

× I prefer meals in other country because I have seen a lot of views in my country which make may make me feel boring and also uh, the wheels in other country can refresh their uh, culture such as the temple in China.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I have seen a lot of sights in my country which may make me feel bored, and also the views in other countries can refresh me with their culture, such as temples in China.

问题包括：1) “meals” 与语境不符，应为 “views” 或 “sights”。2) “in other country” 数/单复不一致，应为“in other countries” 或 “in another country”。3) “a lot of views in my country which make may make me feel boring” 句子混乱，时态与词形问题，改为“which may make me feel bored”。4) “the wheels in other country” 很可能是错误听写，应为“the views in other countries” 或“the... can refresh their culture” 也不通顺，改为“can refresh me with their culture”；“the temple in China” 改为複数“temples in China” 与泛指文化例子一致。建议：注意单复数一致，选择正确名词，简化句子并使用合适的情态动词“may”与形容词“bored”。

× I would like to take a picture of this to show the culture of China.

✓ I would like to take a picture of it to show the culture of China.

错误点：句中代词“this”指代不明确，使用“it”更自然地指代前面提到的事物（例如 temple/scene）。如果指具体某物，也可直接说“a picture of temples”或“a picture of the temple”。建议：使用代词时确保指代明确，口语中常用“it”指代前面提到的场景或物体。