Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce filler words and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Use accurate verb forms (e.g., 'enjoy taking') and plural agreement (e.g., 'old buildings' or 'historic architecture'). Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I like photographing natural scenery such as coastlines and forests, and also urban scenes with historic buildings. In Europe, I often capture old architecture because the details and textures are visually interesting.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement, then support with specific reasons and linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like 'prefer use of' and excessive hesitations. Use correct nouns (e.g., 'rural areas' and 'natural scenery') and combine short ideas with connectors like 'because' or 'so'.

例: I prefer rural areas because the natural scenery is more peaceful and varied. For instance, forests and hills offer calming views and fresh air, so I feel relaxed and energized when I photograph them.

提案: Give a direct stance (either neutral or conditional) with a clear structure: topic sentence + explanation + specific examples. Avoid vague phrases like 'it depends' without detailing the conditions. Use precise vocabulary ('coastlines' instead of 'roots') and correct grammar ('natural scenery', 'especially forests').

例: I think it depends on the scenery: I enjoy views both at home and abroad. For example, if I want coastal landscapes I prefer other countries with dramatic cliffs, but for familiar forests and skies I enjoy photographing them in my own country.

× I really enjoy to take some pictures of natural scenery or, uh, some modern buildings, uh, views.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of natural scenery or some modern buildings and views.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (verb + -ing), not an infinitive. Change 'enjoy to take' to 'enjoy taking'. Also streamline redundancy ('some modern buildings, uh, views') to 'some modern buildings and views' for clarity.

× Especially in Europe, there are a lot of umm, old architecture.

✓ Especially in Europe, there is a lot of old architecture.

'Architecture' is an uncountable noun, so use singular 'there is a lot of' rather than 'there are a lot of'. Use 'old architecture' rather than 'old architectures'.

× That's the good views.

✓ Those are good views.

'Views' is plural, so use the plural demonstrative 'those' and plural verb 'are'. Remove the definite article 'the' unless referring to specific views already mentioned; 'good views' is appropriate.

× I extremely prefer use of uh, rural areas, especially, umm, it's kind of natural.

✓ I strongly prefer rural areas because they are more natural.

'Prefer' is not used with 'use of' here. Replace 'extremely' with 'strongly' or 'greatly' for natural collocation. Combine clauses and correct 'it's kind of natural' to 'they are more natural' to agree with plural 'rural areas'.

× Uh, sceneries are beautiful and I, uh, when I take the, when I see view of natural scenery, I feel relaxed and energized.

✓ Scenery is beautiful and when I see natural views or take photos of them, I feel relaxed and energized.

Use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun rather than 'sceneries'. Simplify by combining clauses: 'when I see natural views or take photos of them' is clearer. Maintain present simple for habitual actions ('I feel').

× I prefer it depends on which kind of scenery in my country or other country.

✓ It depends on what kind of scenery is in my country or another country.

The original mixes 'I prefer' and 'it depends' incorrectly. Use 'It depends on what kind of scenery there is in my country or another country.' Keep present simple for general statements and include 'there is' for existence if needed.

× I really enjoy taking photos of umm natural specially umm roots, forests or like sky.

✓ I really enjoy taking photos of natural scenes, especially forests, roots, or the sky.

'Especially' should modify the list; place it before the items. Use 'natural scenes' rather than 'natural specially'. Clarify 'roots'—if meant 'roots' of trees it's better to say 'tree roots' or just 'trees'. Include articles where needed ('the sky').

× It's amazing views.

✓ They are amazing views.

'Views' is plural so use plural subject pronoun 'they' with the verb 'are'. Alternatively, 'They are amazing' can be used to avoid repeating 'views'.