Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は情熱を示していますが、文法ミスと語順の問題、冗長な表現があります。より自然で明確にするために、主文で直接答え、その後に具体的な理由と例を一つか二つの短い文で付け足してください。接続語（for example, because, and）を使って論理的につなげ、時制と代名詞の一致（I have a dog / I always take pictures of her）を正してください。

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. When I travel, I take pictures constantly because I enjoy capturing new places, and I also take many photos of my dog when she travels with me.

提案: 答えは明確で理由と短い例を含んでおり良い構成ですが、余分な「あー」や断片的な文を避け、例を自然な形で詳しく述べるとさらに良くなります。接続詞（because, for example, such as）を使い、例は一文で簡潔に説明してください。また“took Mount Fuji”は不自然なので“took photos of Mount Fuji”のように目的語を正してください。

例: I definitely prefer photographing the countryside because it offers many photogenic landscapes. For example, on a recent trip to Mount Fuji, I took several wide-angle shots that showed the mountain and surrounding lakes.

提案: 回答はバランスが取れており明確です。さらにレベルを上げるには、理由をもう一つ具体的に述べ、比較をはっきりさせるために接続語（however, while, because）を活用してください。例を加えると説得力が増します。文は2〜3文にまとめ、冗長さを避けてください。

例: It depends on the situation: while I appreciate familiar landscapes in my own country because they remind me of home, I especially enjoy photographing new scenery abroad because it exposes me to different cultures and unusual architecture.

× When I go to travel I into taking pictures all the time especially I had a dog so I'm always taking her pictures.

✓ When I travel, I take pictures all the time; especially because I have a dog, so I'm always taking her picture.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the preposition phrase 'go to travel' and the fragment 'I into taking pictures'. Use the verb 'travel' rather than 'go to travel'. Also tense and aspect need correction: 'I had a dog' implies past; use present 'I have a dog' to match 'I'm always taking'. Combine clauses for clarity and use 'taking her picture' (singular) or 'taking pictures of her'. Use commas and connectors to improve flow. Suggested improvement: 'When I travel, I take pictures all the time; especially because I have a dog, so I'm always taking her picture.'

× Uh, recently I went to Fuji and I took Mount Fuji.

✓ Recently I went to Fuji and took a photo of Mount Fuji.

The phrase 'took Mount Fuji' is incorrect because 'take' needs an object like 'a photo of'. The intended meaning is photographing Mount Fuji, so say 'took a photo of Mount Fuji' or 'photographed Mount Fuji'. Also omit the filler 'Uh' in written form and keep simple past tense consistent. Suggested improvement: 'Recently I went to Fuji and took a photo of Mount Fuji.'

× Yes, I adore taking pictures at different sites.

✓ Yes, I adore taking pictures at different sites.

This sentence is grammatically correct regarding singular/plural usage. No correction needed. Keep plural 'pictures' and plural 'sites' as they match the meaning of multiple locations.

× Definitely, I prefer to take pictures in the countryside because there are so many photogenic landscapes.

✓ Definitely, I prefer to take pictures in the countryside because there are so many photogenic landscapes.

This sentence correctly uses present simple 'prefer' to state a general preference and 'there are' for plural 'landscapes'. No correction needed.

× I think it depends on the situation.

✓ I think it depends on the situation.

This sentence correctly uses present simple 'think' and 'depends' for a general statement. No correction needed.

× When I travel in my own country, I enjoy familiar landscapes, but when I visit other countries I particularly enjoy photographing new scenery.

✓ When I travel in my own country, I enjoy familiar landscapes, but when I visit other countries, I particularly enjoy photographing new scenery.

The sentence is correct in tense and meaning. Add a comma after 'countries' for clarity and natural pause. 'Photographing new scenery' correctly uses the gerund to describe liking an activity.