Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., "take pictures of different views," "remind me of places I've visited"). Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views when I travel. For example, I often photograph landscapes and street scenes because the photos remind me of places I've visited and the memories I made there. I usually share these pictures with my friends and family to show them what I saw.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler words. Explain one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because," "so," "for example"). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "peaceful," "fresh air," "natural scenery"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and finish the thought coherently.

例: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and have beautiful natural scenery. For example, the countryside usually has fresh air and quiet walking paths, which helps me relax and recharge. So I often visit villages or hills when I want to escape the busy city.

提案: Give a clear, fluent response: start with a direct statement, then support it with specific examples and reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "My country has many spectacular views") and avoid repetition. Keep it to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: I prefer the views in my own country because it has many spectacular landscapes. For instance, we have dramatic mountain ranges and beautiful ocean coastlines that I find unforgettable. Although there are places I haven't visited yet, I would rather explore my country's scenery before going abroad.

× Yes, I do like taking picture different views while I'm traveling somewhere.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views while I'm traveling somewhere.

The noun 'picture' needs to be plural 'pictures' when referring to multiple images, and the preposition 'of' is required to link 'taking pictures' with 'different views'. Use the -ing form 'taking' correctly with the noun phrase 'pictures of different views'. Suggestions: change 'picture' to 'pictures' and add 'of' before 'different views'.

× The time I take picture and photos Remember Me where I visit and I also share with my friend and family.

✓ The pictures I take remind me where I visited, and I also share them with my friends and family.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and capitalization and missing plural forms. 'The time I take picture and photos' is unclear; use 'The pictures I take'. 'Remember Me' is incorrect verb form and capitalization; use 'remind me'. 'Where I visit' should be past tense 'where I visited' to match context. 'Share with my friend and family' needs object 'them' and plural 'friends'. Suggestions: reorder phrase to subject 'The pictures I take', verb 'remind', correct tense and add object pronoun.

× I prefer, uh, rural areas because rural areas, especially for environmental in quiet places.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are especially quiet and have a better environment.

The phrase 'especially for environmental in quiet places' misuses prepositions and word forms. Use 'have a better environment' or 'are environmentally quieter'. Also avoid repeating 'rural areas'. Suggestions: replace awkward phrase with 'they are especially quiet and have a better environment'.

× Whenever, uh, when I usually visit any, uh, countryside this time, like, uh, I always fall in love with Nesser and this also give me a lot of energy and I used to, uh.

✓ Whenever I visit the countryside, I always fall in love with nature; it also gives me a lot of energy.

The sentence contains filler words and unclear nouns. 'Nesser' appears to be a misspelling of 'nature'. 'This also give me' has subject-verb agreement error and wrong pronoun; use 'it also gives me'. 'I used to' is incomplete. Suggestions: remove fillers, correct 'Nesser' to 'nature', fix subject-verb agreement, and complete the clause.

× I prefer my country's views.

✓ I prefer the views in my country.

'My country's views' is grammatically possible but sounds awkward; using 'the views in my country' is clearer. Also matches expected prepositional phrase for location. Suggestion: rephrase to 'the views in my country'.

× My country's there are a lot of places really, uh, seen the scenario is very spectacular, especially ocean views and also mountain views.

✓ There are many places in my country with really spectacular scenery, especially ocean and mountain views.

Sentence mixes word order and awkward phrases. Use 'There are many places in my country' instead of 'My country's there are a lot of places'. 'Seen the scenario' is incorrect; use 'spectacular scenery'. Also combine 'ocean views and also mountain views' into 'ocean and mountain views'. Suggestions: reorder to subject 'There are many places in my country' and use 'scenery' for natural views.

× There was a lot of place. I do not visit here. I visit, but I, I'm interested to visit there.

✓ There are still many places I have not visited here; I would like to visit them.

Tense and number errors: 'There was a lot of place' should be 'There are many places' (plural and present). 'I do not visit here' and 'I visit, but I, I'm interested to visit there' are awkward and mix tenses. Use present perfect 'I have not visited' to indicate experience up to now, and 'I would like to visit them' to express desire. Suggestions: use correct plural nouns, present perfect for experiences, and a polite modal 'would like' for intention.

× Uh, so my country is undoubtedly.

✓ So my country is undoubtedly beautiful.

The sentence is incomplete; 'undoubtedly' needs an adjective or clause to complete the thought. Add a descriptive adjective such as 'beautiful' to finish the sentence. Suggestions: complete the sentence with an adjective like 'beautiful' or a clause explaining why.