Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn tự nhiên và ý tưởng rõ ràng, nhưng nên tránh lặp từ (“capture the moment” và “freeze the moment”) và sắp xếp câu ngắn gọn hơn. Thêm một câu mô tả cụ thể về loại cảnh bạn thích (ví dụ: hoàng hôn, bờ biển, kiến trúc) để nội dung phong phú hơn. Hạn chế độ dài tổng thể không quá 5 câu và dùng một vài từ nối để mạch lạc (for example, especially, because).

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing sunsets and coastal views when I’m with friends or family because the warm light makes the scenes memorable. For example, last summer we watched the sun set over the beach and I captured several vibrant photos to keep.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng (thích nông thôn) nhưng chứa nhiều lỗi từ vựng/diễn đạt không phù hợp (“bodeldos”, “Grasshopper in cities”) khiến người nghe bối rối. Cần dùng từ chính xác (e.g., rolling hills, mountains, quiet streets) và cung cấp một lý do cụ thể, kèm từ nối như “because” hoặc “so”. Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tránh những từ không xác định hoặc sai chính tả.

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy rolling hills and mountain scenery, which feel peaceful and refreshing. For instance, when I return to my hometown I like walking along quiet country lanes and taking photos of the green fields.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ (“my countries” nên là “my country”; câu hơi dài và hơi lặp). Nên bắt đầu với câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi đưa ví dụ hoặc so sánh cụ thể (ví dụ: particular region or landmark) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

例: I prefer the views in my country because we have diverse landscapes, from beaches to mountains. For example, I can visit beautiful coastal areas or historic highland towns without going abroad, which makes domestic travel very satisfying.

× I love taking photos and especially when I am with my friends and my family.

✓ I love taking photos, especially when I am with my friends and family.

The sentence is correct in verb + -ing usage but needs punctuation and redundancy correction: remove the extra 'my' before 'family' and add a comma before 'especially' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'friends and family' as a natural phrase.

× I can capture the moment and freeze the moment to save later.

✓ I can capture the moment and freeze it to save for later.

Repetition of 'the moment' is awkward; replace the second noun with the pronoun 'it'. Also add 'for' in the phrase 'save for later' which is the correct collocation.

× I prefer the countryside because of the nature and the picturesque scenery.

✓ I prefer the countryside because of the natural surroundings and the picturesque scenery.

Use 'nature' without article is odd here; better to use 'natural surroundings' or just 'nature' without 'the'. This is an issue of noun choice and article use. Suggestion: 'natural surroundings' or 'nature' depending on emphasis.

× I love the bodeldos and mountains scenery when I come back to my hometown rather than the surroundings.

✓ I love the hills and mountain scenery when I come back to my hometown, more than the city surroundings.

'bodeldos' is not an English word; likely meant 'hills'. 'Mountains scenery' should be 'mountain scenery' (singular adjective), and compare with 'city surroundings' for clarity. This corrects plural/singular agreement and word choice.

× Grasshopper in cities.

✓ I don't like the buzzing or crowded feel of cities.

'Grasshopper in cities.' is an incomplete sentence and unclear. It lacks a verb and subject agreement; likely the speaker meant to contrast rural wildlife with city life. Replace with a full sentence describing the contrast. This fixes sentence structure and makes meaning clear.

× I think the scenery in my countries is the best, so I don't need to travel abroad to enjoy the beautiful views because there are a lot to go and to do in my own country.

✓ I think the scenery in my country is the best, so I don't need to travel abroad to enjoy beautiful views because there is a lot to see and do in my own country.

'countries' should be singular 'country' to match the speaker's meaning. 'there are a lot to go and to do' is ungrammatical: use 'there is a lot to see and do' or 'there are many things to see and do'. Also remove redundant 'the' before 'beautiful views'. This addresses subject-verb agreement and idiomatic expressions.