Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答题要更简洁并修正重复与语法错误；在开头用一句主题句直接回答并用一两句具体细节支持。注意避免重复词（如“I I”）和语法错误（如“really get brings”）。可练习使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. I especially enjoy photographing wild animals and scenic park landscapes because capturing the perfect moment gives me a real sense of achievement. For example, last month I spent an afternoon photographing ducks on a lake and was thrilled when one flew into frame.

提案: 回答需要更直接并减少口头语（如“uh”“you know”）。把理由拆成清晰句子并使用连接词（because, so, for example）。补充具体例子来增强内容。注意动词形式与词序，如“helps me recharge my energy”。

例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I grew up in a big city and being close to nature helps me relax. For example, I enjoy photographing trees and birds in country parks, which recharges my energy after a busy week. Also, rural landscapes often offer quieter, more varied photo opportunities.

提案: 句子需更准确、流畅，修正语法与重复（如“I country”,“is better than uh are better than others”）。开头直接给出立场，用具体例子支持（列举一到两个代表性景点），避免泛泛而谈。

例: I prefer scenery in my own country because China has very diverse landscapes. For example, I can visit dense forests in Sichuan or the grasslands in Inner Mongolia, and even deserts like the Gobi—each offers unique photographic opportunities. These varied environments make China especially appealing to me.

× I I think getting a great photo really get brings me a sense of achievement and satisfaction.

✓ I think getting a great photo really brings me a sense of achievement and satisfaction.

存在多重问题： 1) 重复“I I”，属于冗余，应删除多余的“I”。 2) 使用了“get brings”两个动词连用造成动词冲突，正确形式为单一第三人称单数动词“brings”。 3) 根据句子主语“getting a great photo”（动名词短语，视作单数），谓语应使用第三人称单数形式。建议简化句子并保持动词一致。

× I prefer rural areas to urban cities because I grew up in big cities and being closer to nature, UH really helps me relax and uh, and besides, I also prefer taking pictures of trees, animals, birds and so on and you know, which helps me re recharge my energy.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban cities because I grew up in big cities, and being closer to nature really helps me relax. Besides, I also prefer taking pictures of trees, animals and birds, which helps me recharge my energy.

问题包括： 1) 句子结构冗长且有口语填充词（uh, you know），影响连贯性，应删除。 2) “being closer to nature ... helps” 中谓语“helps”与主语“being closer to nature”（动名词短语，单数）一致，原句因插入语位置不当导致读起来混乱，需调整为清晰主谓结构。 3) “re recharge” 为重复拼写错误，应为“recharge”。建议去掉多余语气词，分成两句，保持主谓一致并修正拼写。

× I prefer the scenery in I country UH over others because China is a big country and offers a wide range of landscapes and for example we have forest lands, a grassland, desert and along coastline.

✓ I prefer the scenery in my country over others because China is a big country and offers a wide range of landscapes; for example, we have forests, grasslands, deserts and long coastlines.

问题有几点： 1) “I country” 显然是口误，正确应为“my country”。 2) 名词复数与冠词使用不当：forest lands → forests，a grassland → grasslands（或 a grassland 改为 a grassland 的单数但句中列举应统一复数或一致形式），desert → deserts，along coastline → long coastlines 或 along the coastline，原句混用单复数和介词短语不当。 3) 建议使用复数形式列举不同地貌时保持一致，并修正拼写与词序。

× Though I think the views in China is better than uh are better than others.

✓ I think the views in China are better than those in other countries.

存在主谓不一致和表达混乱问题： 1) 主语“the views in China” 为复数，谓语应使用复数动词“are”，原句出现“is”和“are”混用。 2) “better than others” 不够明确，应改为“better than those in other countries”以明确比较对象。 3) 删除口语填充词“uh”，使句子更正式、清晰。