Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, accuracy and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct word choice (e.g., 'scenery' not 'science'), and reduce filler words like 'uh'. Add one supporting detail using a linking word. Keep answer under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel I often photograph beautiful scenery and interesting shops because they capture the atmosphere of a place. I also try to take pictures at different times of day to record changing light and mood.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct and more specific. Begin with a clear preference sentence, then give two specific supporting details linked with words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid repeating words and correct plural/singular forms (e.g., 'memories', 'scenery').

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up in the countryside. For example, I have many fond memories of wide fields, natural scenery such as rivers and hills, and interacting with farm animals, which feel more peaceful than the city.

提案: Correct vocabulary and be specific about what you mean. Start with a direct statement, then give clear examples and avoid incorrect words ('salary' → 'scenery'; 'architectures' → 'architecture'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as'.

例: I prefer views in my own country because China is so vast and varied. For example, I enjoy natural scenery like mountains and lakes, and historical architecture such as the Summer Palace, the Forbidden City and the Great Wall, which reflect our long history.

× Yes I do, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I go travel I will take pictures of the beautiful science and uh for some interesting shops.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of different views. Especially when I travel, I take pictures of beautiful scenery and interesting shops.

Errors: incorrect verb phrase 'go travel' — should be 'travel' (present tense); incorrect future 'I will take' inconsistent with habitual action; 'science' is incorrect word, likely 'scenery'; run-on sentence and missing commas. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions ('I travel' and 'I take pictures'). Replace 'science' with 'scenery'. Break into shorter sentences and add commas where needed.

× I prefer we use in rural areas because my hometown is in countryside.

✓ I prefer rural areas because my hometown is in the countryside.

Errors: incorrect pronoun/phrase 'we use in rural areas' is ungrammatical and unnecessary; missing article 'the' before 'countryside'. Suggestion: Remove 'we use' and use 'in the countryside' to refer to a general area; use 'prefer rural areas' to express preference.

× I have a lot of good memory, memories of rural areas and there are many natural scenery and you can play with the animals.

✓ I have a lot of good memories of rural areas. There is a lot of natural scenery, and you can play with animals.

Errors: 'memory, memories' mixed forms — use plural 'memories'; 'many natural scenery' incorrect countable/uncountable — 'scenery' is uncountable so use 'a lot of' or 'much' or 'plenty of'; 'the animals' implies specific animals, better 'animals' in general. Suggestion: Use plural for memories and treat 'scenery' as uncountable ('a lot of natural scenery').

× I prefer views in my own country because China is so vast and varied.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because China is so vast and varied.

No grammatical correction needed for tense here; sentence is correct. Explanation: The present simple 'prefer' correctly expresses a general preference; 'is' correctly describes China's characteristics. No change required.

× For example, I love the natural salary and also ancient architectures, especially in Beijing, the Summer Palace, the Forbidden City and the Great Wall.

✓ For example, I love the natural scenery and ancient architecture, especially in Beijing: the Summer Palace, the Forbidden City, and the Great Wall.

Errors: 'salary' is incorrect word choice for 'scenery'; 'architectures' is incorrect plural — use 'architecture' as an uncountable noun when referring to style or historical buildings collectively. Suggestion: Replace 'salary' with 'scenery' and 'architectures' with 'architecture'. Use commas and colons to list landmarks, and include 'and' before the last item.