Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับความถูกต้องของไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำนามให้เป็นพหูพจน์หรือมี article ที่เหมาะสม เช่น picture → pictures, view → views และใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ชัดเจนขึ้น เพิ่มการเชื่อมโยงประโยคโดยใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น "because", "so", และหลีกเลี่ยงความซ้ำซ้อนโดยย่อความยาวให้อยู่ในไม่เกิน 4-5 ประโยค

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I wanted to be a photographer when I was young. I often travel to places like beaches and mountains, and I try to capture the scenery at sunrise or sunset. These photos help me remember special moments from my trips.

提案: แก้ไขไวยากรณ์และการเรียงคำ เช่น "I grew up in a rural area" และใช้ประโยคสนับสนุนที่ชัดเจนเชื่อมด้วยคำเชื่อม (however, also) เพิ่มรายละเอียดที่เฉพาะเจาะจงเกี่ยวกับสิ่งที่ชอบในแต่ละแบบ และหลีกเลี่ยงวลีที่ไม่ชัด เช่น "bike like at night high building like this"

例: Actually, I like both. I grew up in a rural area, so I appreciate the peaceful, green landscapes there because they feel homely and relaxing. However, I also enjoy urban views when I visit Bangkok; the impressive skyline and brightly lit high-rise buildings at night are very exciting.

提案: แก้ความผิดพลาดของคำพูดและการสะกด (เช่น "that asked" → "such as"; "grand palate" → "Grand Palace") และปรับโครงสร้างเพื่อให้ชัดเจน ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่ออธิบายเหตุผลว่าเพราะอะไรทัศนียภาพในประเทศตัวเองน่าดึงดูดยิ่งกว่า เพิ่มคำอธิบายเฉพาะเจาะจงเกี่ยวกับองค์ประกอบแสงและบรรยากาศ

例: I've been to several places such as China, Singapore and Hong Kong, but I prefer the views in Bangkok, Thailand, especially at night. The city skyline and illuminated landmarks like the Grand Palace look stunning and create a romantic atmosphere because of the warm lights and reflections on the river.

× I enjoy taking picture of different view because when I was young my dream was to be a photographer.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views because when I was young my dream was to be a photographer.

Use plural forms for countable nouns when speaking generally. 'picture' should be 'pictures' and 'view' should be 'views' to indicate multiple items. Suggestion: use 'pictures' and 'views' when referring to more than one item.

× I love traveling to places such as beach and mountain and I like to capture the scenery especially as sunrise or sunset so I can remember those memories.

✓ I love traveling to places such as the beach and the mountains and I like to capture the scenery especially at sunrise or sunset so I can remember those memories.

Use definite articles 'the' with 'beach' and 'mountains' when referring to general types of places in this context. Use preposition 'at' with times of day: 'at sunrise' and 'at sunset'. Suggestion: add 'the' before geographical nouns and use 'at' for specific times of day.

× Actually I like both of them.

✓ Actually, I like both of them.

This sentence mainly needs a comma after introductory 'Actually' for natural flow; grammatically 'both of them' is fine. No singular/plural change necessary. Suggestion: add a comma after introductory adverbs.

× I grow up in rural area so I enjoy the peaceful green view there because they feel homey and relaxing.

✓ I grew up in a rural area so I enjoy the peaceful green views there because they feel homey and relaxing.

Use past tense 'grew up' (past action). Add article 'a' before 'rural area'. Use plural 'views' to match 'they'. Suggestion: change 'grow up' to 'grew up', add 'a', and use 'views'.

× But I also enjoy urban view when I visit Bangkok, the capital of Thailand.

✓ But I also enjoy urban views when I visit Bangkok, the capital of Thailand.

Use plural 'views' for general reference to city scenery. 'Urban view' is less natural; 'urban views' or 'the urban view' would be better. Suggestion: use plural 'views'.

× I love them. Impressive skyline and bike like at night high building like this.

✓ I love them. The impressive skyline and bright lights on high buildings at night are like this.

Original is fragmented and unclear. Add article 'the', use verbs to form complete clause, and replace 'bike' with 'bright' or 'lights'—likely intended 'lights'. Use plural 'buildings'. Suggestion: form full sentences with subject and verb and choose correct words: 'the impressive skyline and bright lights on high buildings at night'.

× I have been to many countries that asked China, Singapore and Hong Kong, but I prefer the view in Bangkok, Thailand especially at night.

✓ I have been to many countries, such as China, Singapore and Hong Kong, but I prefer the views in Bangkok, Thailand, especially at night.

Use 'such as' to introduce examples, not 'that asked'. Add commas for clarity. Use plural 'views' for general scenery. Suggestion: replace 'that asked' with 'such as' and pluralize 'view'.

× The city skyline and illuminated landmark like grand palate look stunning and create a romantic atmosphere.

✓ The city skyline and illuminated landmarks like the Grand Palace look stunning and create a romantic atmosphere.

Pluralize 'landmark' to 'landmarks' to match 'the city skyline and landmarks'. Capitalize proper noun 'Grand Palace' and include 'the'. 'Like' is fine to give an example. Suggestion: use plural 'landmarks' and proper capitalization, and include 'the Grand Palace'.