Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体表达了观点和习惯，但存在语法错误、用词不当、语音上的犹豫词较多且句子冗长。建议： 1) 修正语法与拼写错误，例如把“AI”改为“I”，把“put on it in my WeChat moment”简化为“post them on my WeChat Moments”。 2) 减少填充词（umm, and）和重复，使用1-2个完整句子直接回答题目，再用1-2个补充细节。比如先给主题句，然后说明什么时候拍、拍什么和分享方式。 3) 使用更准确的词汇（capture -> take photographs / capture images; sceneries -> scenery / views）。 练习时可以句子练习并录音自检，确保不超过5句并流畅连贯。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photographs to preserve special moments, especially when I travel. For example, I often take pictures of landscapes and city scenes, then post the best ones on my WeChat Moments to share with friends.

提案: 回答表达了偏好但结构混乱、重复和犹豫较多；语法和词汇不准确（urban sceneries is -> urban scenery is / I usually see it -> I see rural views often）。建议： 1) 用一两句直接陈述偏好并给出理由，然后补充一两个具体例子。避免重复话语和过多填充词。 2) 注意主谓一致与词形（sceneries改为scenery或views）。 3) 提供具体比较点（如建筑、氛围、便利性）使回答更具体。

例: I prefer urban areas because they offer unique architecture and vibrant street life that I don’t see at home. For example, when I visit the city I enjoy photographing modern buildings and busy markets, which feel special compared to the rural scenery near my hometown.

提案: 回答表达了偏好并给出理由，但语言重复严重，缺少具体例子和流畅的连接。建议： 1) 精简并直接给出主题句，然后用连词（for example, for instance, such as）引出具体例子。 2) 避免重复词（ancient views and modern views -> ancient and modern scenery），使用更自然的搭配（historical sites, modern architecture）。 3) 给出1-2个具体地点或类型的例子，使回答更有说服力和信息量。

例: I prefer scenery in my own country because China has a wide variety of landscapes and historical sites. For instance, I enjoy visiting ancient towns with traditional architecture and modern cities with impressive skyscrapers, so I often take photos of both types.

× I think photography is an important way to remember the moment AI really like and I usually capture the beautiful sceneries when I travel and then I put on it in my umm WeChat moment and share it with my friends and.

✓ I think photography is an important way to remember the moments I really like, and I usually capture beautiful scenery when I travel, then put it on my WeChat Moments and share it with my friends.

句子结构混乱，包含多处冗余和断裂（如“AI really like”、“put on it in my umm WeChat moment”），需要分成多个并列成分并调整词序与搭配。建议把“the moment”改为复数“the moments”或直接用“moments I really like”，将“sceneries”改为不可数名词“scenery”，并把“put on it in my WeChat moment”改为更自然的“put it on my WeChat Moments”。另外用逗号和连词把句子连贯起来。

× I usually capture the beautiful sceneries when I travel and then I put on it in my umm WeChat moment and share it with my friends and.

✓ I usually capture beautiful scenery when I travel and then put it on my WeChat Moments to share with my friends.

“sceneries”通常不可数，使用复数不自然，改为不可数名词“scenery”。“put on it in my WeChat moment”中的代词和介词搭配错误，应为“put it on my WeChat Moments”。建议使用简洁表达并注意名词不可数用法。

× I prefer the urban areas because uh, my home is in uh Shua county. It is a small county so there are many rural views. I usually see it but but urban sceneries is umm is special for me, so I often uh, so I.

✓ I prefer urban areas because my home is in Shua County. It is a small county, so there are many rural views I usually see, but urban scenery is special to me, so I often...

“urban sceneries is”主谓不一致：若用复数sceneries应接复数动词，但更地道的是用不可数名词“scenery”，与单数谓语“is”搭配时应为“scenery is”。句中还有代词“it”指代不明，应删去或放在正确位置。建议使用简洁句子并保持主谓一致。

× there are many rural views.

✓ there are many rural views.

此句本身无明显错误，但“views”可视语境保留或改为“rural scenes/scenery”。如果强调数量使用“many rural scenes”，若泛指可用“rural scenery”。此处无需改动，作为备注说明名词选择。

× I prefer the views in our country because I think, uh, my country, China has, uh, all kinds of sceneries like the, some ancient views and modern views and uh, uh, there are many beautiful and historical places, uh, buildings in my country and uh, such as.

✓ I prefer the views in my country because China has all kinds of scenery, such as ancient and modern sites; there are many beautiful and historical places and buildings.

句子赘余且结构不完整（以“such as”结尾却未举例），有重复停顿词。将“my country, China has, uh, all kinds of sceneries like the, some ancient views and modern views”简化为“China has all kinds of scenery, such as ancient and modern sites”，并把后半句整合为“there are many beautiful and historical places and buildings”。同时将“sceneries”改为不可数“scenery”。