Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Відмінний ентузіазм і емоційність, але потрібно уникати повтора слів, зайвих звуків-паразитів ("umm", "uh") та зайвих пауз. Також варто зробити відповідь більш стислою і структурованою: почніть з теми, додайте одну-дві конкретні деталі та висновок. Використовуйте зв'язки (for example, because, so) для логіки вислову.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos and videos of different places. For example, when I travel with family or friends I always take many shots, because looking back at them on my phone helps me remember the happiest moments. So photography has become my favorite way to capture memories.

提案: Відповідь містить багато заповнювачів та неповних фраз; це знижує природність і зрозумілість. Потрібно давати чіткий топік у першому реченні, потім одну або дві конкретні причини з прикладом. Уникайте повторів і слів-паразитів, використовуйте зв'язки (because, since, so) для логічності.

例: I prefer rural views because I like peace and quiet away from the city's hustle and bustle. For instance, I enjoy walking in the countryside where I can admire open fields and fresh air, which helps me relax.

提案: Відповідь обірвана й містить незвичні вирази («ambient abundance» звучить неприродно). Потрібно відповідати прямо, розвинути думку з конкретною причиною або прикладом, і завершувати речення. Використовуйте прості, природні фрази й зв'язки (because, for example, so).

例: I prefer views in my own country because there are many interesting tourist attractions nearby. For example, I can visit historical sites and natural parks without long flights, so I often discover new places at a lower cost.

× I really love taking photos and videos of different places and I I always do that when I travel with my family or friends.

✓ I really love taking photos and videos of different places and I always do that when I travel with my family or friends.

The original sentence repeats 'I' twice ('I I'), which is a typographical/repetition error rather than a grammar category from the list; however it affects the verb phrase flow. Remove the extra 'I' so the present participle construction and coordination with 'and' remain correct. Suggestion: proofread and read aloud to catch repeated words. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Umm I love getting back to and scroll the phone and these photos remind me of the happiest moments in my life.

✓ I love going back and scrolling through my phone; these photos remind me of the happiest moments in my life.

The phrase 'getting back to and scroll the phone' uses incorrect verbs and missing preposition. Use 'going back' plus gerund 'scrolling' with preposition 'through' for correct collocation. Also separate clauses with a semicolon or period for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Although it's really difficult for me to put umm, a finger, uh, on one of them. But uh, overall, I really enjoy, umm, a rural areas as umm, I'm a kind of person who prefers to shy away from uh, hustle and bustle of the city and umm, uh, I do love to admire.

✓ Although it's really difficult for me to put a finger on one of them, overall I really enjoy rural areas, as I'm the kind of person who prefers to shy away from the hustle and bustle of the city and I do love to admire them.

Multiple article and noun phrase issues: 'a rural areas' mixes singular article with plural noun — remove 'a' before plural 'rural areas'. 'a kind of person' is fine but commonly 'the kind of person' fits when specifying a personal trait. 'hustle and bustle' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific concept. Also sentence fragments and disfluencies were smoothed and a plural pronoun 'them' added to refer to 'rural areas'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Well, it's really difficult for me to put a finger on one of them, but I would opt for using my country as I believe that there is an ambient abundance of touristic attractions in my country, so I.

✓ Well, it's really difficult for me to choose one, but I would opt for my own country because I believe there is an abundant number of tourist attractions there.

The original contains awkward collocations and an incomplete ending ('so I.'). 'Opt for using my country' is unnatural — say 'opt for my own country'. 'Ambient abundance' and 'touristic' are incorrect collocations; use 'abundant' and 'tourist attractions'. Also finish the sentence properly; avoid trailing fragments. Grammar problem type ID: 26