Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers (umm), and use correct noun phrases (e.g. "photography", "selfies"). Add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Focus on natural word order and verb forms.

例: Yes, I enjoy photography, but I usually take selfies and photos with my friends rather than landscape shots. For example, when I travel with friends I often capture candid moments to remember the day.

提案: Give a direct answer and a clear reason, using correct grammar and vocabulary. Remove repetitions and use linking words (e.g. "however", "because"). Use accurate nouns ("buildings" or "architecture" instead of "structures of oil"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and the variety of buildings. However, I also like rural scenery for its natural beauty.

提案: Answer directly and support with specific reasons. Use correct comparative structures (e.g. "compared to other countries") and accurate vocabulary (e.g. "rich architecture", "cultural variety"). Avoid vague phrases and fillers. Provide one concrete example to strengthen your answer.

例: I prefer views in my country because Colombia has diverse landscapes and rich architecture. For example, historic towns like Cartagena offer colorful colonial buildings that I find more appealing than many places I've seen abroad.

× Yes, I like take pictures.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures.

After the verb 'like', use the gerund form of the verb (verb + -ing). 'Like take' is incorrect; 'like taking' is correct. Suggestion: use 'I like taking pictures' or 'I like to take pictures' (both are acceptable).

× actually I like the photographic umm, maybe it's not much of views, but I like the personal photographic selfies or photographic with my friend.

✓ Actually I like photography; maybe it's not many views, but I like personal selfies or photos with my friend.

Multiple issues: 'the photographic' is incorrect noun form and article use; use 'photography'. 'Not much of views' is ungrammatical — use 'not many views' or 'not many scenic views'. 'Personal photographic selfies' is redundant; use 'personal selfies' or 'personal photographs'. Also 'photographic with my friend' should be 'photos with my friend'. Suggestion: simplify sentences: 'I like photography; it's maybe not about scenic views, but I enjoy personal selfies and photos with my friend.' This correction follows noun forms and article usage.

× Well, I prefer both the urban and rural areas.

✓ Well, I prefer both urban and rural areas.

The article 'the' before 'urban and rural areas' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Use plural noun without 'the' for general preferences. Suggestion: 'I prefer both urban and rural areas' or 'I prefer both the urban and the rural areas' if referring to specific areas already mentioned.

× So, umm, if if I had choose one, I choose the urban areas, uh, because I like them structures of oil.

✓ So, umm, if I had to choose one, I would choose urban areas, because I like their architecture.

'Had choose' is incorrect; after 'had' use past participle ('had chosen') or use 'had to choose' to express hypothetical. The conditional requires 'would choose'. 'Choose' alone is incorrect in this conditional. 'The urban areas' can be 'urban areas' generally. 'Them structures of oil' is incorrect pronoun and noun choice; likely meant 'their structures' or 'their architecture'. 'Architecture' fits context. Suggestion: use 'if I had to choose one, I would choose urban areas'.

× I prefer views in my country because I like Colombia.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I like Colombia.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; it correctly uses present simple to state a preference. No change needed.

× Colombia for me is the best country compared for other countries.

✓ For me, Colombia is the best country compared to other countries.

Use 'compared to' (or 'compared with') rather than 'compared for'. Also move 'for me' to the start for natural order. 'The best country' is correct superlative form. Suggestion: 'For me, Colombia is the best country compared to other countries' or more simply 'For me, Colombia is the best country.'

× So we have any a lot of specialists, architecture and aha.

✓ We have a lot of specialists and much architecture.

'Any a lot of' is ungrammatical; use 'a lot of' or 'many'. 'Specialists' is countable so 'many specialists' or 'a lot of specialists' is fine. 'Architecture' is uncountable, so use 'much architecture' or 'a lot of architecture'. Remove filler 'aha'. Suggestion: 'We have many specialists and a lot of interesting architecture.'