Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và đúng ngữ pháp. Tránh tiếng lắp (umm) và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: nêu quan điểm, giải thích ngắn và ví dụ cụ thể. Chú ý số ít/ số nhiều (a picture/ different views) và dùng dạng động từ đúng (taking pictures, keep memories). Nên không vượt quá 3-4 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me keep memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets or cityscapes when I travel so I can remember how those places felt.

提案: Cải thiện: Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (I prefer views; I live in a rural area). Thêm lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn để làm phong phú câu trả lời. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, for example). Giữ tối đa 3 câu.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up there and enjoy the peaceful scenery. For example, I like walking along country roads and looking at fields and traditional houses, which feels relaxing.

提案: Cải thiện: Tránh phát ngôn có thể mang tính so sánh thiếu tế nhị. Nói rõ hơn và chính xác về ngữ pháp (other countries, my country doesn't have as many scenic spots). Nên nêu lý do cụ thể về điểm khác biệt (architecture, cleanliness, modern design) và kết thúc bằng một câu cân bằng. Tránh tổng quát hóa về cả một quốc gia.

例: I tend to prefer views in other countries because some places abroad have very modern architecture and well-maintained parks. However, Vietnam also has many beautiful natural landscapes such as Ha Long Bay, which I appreciate.

× Yes, I am free for taking picture of different view because it's a way for me umm keeping the memorable. Picture in my mind.

✓ Yes, I am free to take pictures of different views because it's a way for me to keep memorable pictures in my mind.

The student used incorrect verb forms and noun forms: 'for taking' should be 'to take' (infinitive after 'free'), 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match context (pluralization), 'different view' should be 'different views', and 'keeping the memorable. Picture in my mind' is ungrammatical; it should be 'to keep memorable pictures in my mind' using infinitive 'to keep' and plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: use infinitive 'to' after adjectives like 'free', make nouns plural when general/plural meaning is implied, and use a single coherent clause for 'to keep memorable pictures in my mind.'

× I prefer view in rural areas because I'm I am a person who live in rural areas, so I think the field, the road and everything in rural areas I do love it.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I am a person who lives in the countryside, so I love the fields, the roads and everything in rural areas.

Multiple plural and agreement errors: 'view' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally. 'I'm I am' is repetition; use one 'I am'. 'Who live' must be 'who lives' because the relative clause agrees with 'a person' (singular). 'The field, the road' should be plural 'the fields, the roads' to match 'everything' and general meaning. The phrase 'I do love it' is awkward; better 'I love them' or 'I love everything'. Suggestion: check singular/plural consistency and subject-verb agreement in relative clauses; use plural nouns for general references to multiple items.

× Personally I prefer views in other country because my country is Vietnam, but Vietnam has not a beautiful scenery as much as other country like Singapore.

✓ Personally, I prefer views in other countries because my country is Vietnam, but Vietnam does not have as beautiful scenery as other countries like Singapore.

Errors with countability and comparative structure: 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally. 'Has not a beautiful scenery' is incorrect word order and article use; use 'does not have' and 'scenery' is uncountable so no 'a'. The comparative 'as much as' is unnatural with 'scenery'; use 'as beautiful ... as' or 'as much' with uncountable nouns. Correct structure: 'does not have as beautiful scenery as other countries.' Suggestion: use 'does not have' for possession, treat 'scenery' as uncountable (no 'a'), and use parallel comparative structure 'as [adjective] as' when comparing qualities.