Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и без лишних слов; начните с чётного топик‑предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали и завершите кратким заключением. Избегайте пауз и слов-паразитов («uh», «like»), следите за временем глаголов и порядком слов (например, «I haven't taken many photos recently» вместо «I do not take photos that recently»).

例: Yes, I do. When I go out I usually photograph landscapes, local food and anything that looks aesthetically pleasing. However, I haven't taken many photos recently because I haven't been going out much.

提案: Дайте чёткий ответ в первой фразе, затем объясните причину с использованием связок (for example, because, while) и избегайте разговорных вкраплений и неверных выражений («in a depression movie» неуместно). Говорите более ясно о настроении: используйте устойчивые выражения («when I'm feeling sociable», «when I need peace»).

例: It depends on my mood. When I'm feeling sociable I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and variety, while when I need peace I prefer rural landscapes because they are calming and give me space to think.

提案: Ответьте прямо, затем уточните причину и добавьте короткое сравнение. Избегайте противоречивых формулировок и слов-паразитов; используйте простое прошедшее/настоящее время и избегайте «will» для общих предпочтений (используйте «I usually» или «I prefer»).

例: I prefer views in my own country because Kyrgyzstan's natural scenery is very beautiful and familiar to me. However, I also enjoy scenery in other countries and like to explore new landscapes when I travel.

× But these days I don't really go out. That's why I do not take photos that recently.

✓ But these days I don't really go out. That's why I have not taken many photos recently.

The original second sentence uses incorrect word order and tense: 'do not take photos that recently' is ungrammatical. The correct phrasing for an action not done in the recent period is present perfect ('have not taken') with 'recently'. Also 'many' fits better than nothing to indicate quantity. Suggestion: use present perfect for past actions with present relevance and place 'recently' at the end of the sentence. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Like if I'm in a, uh, really sociable mood, then I like, uh, urban views.

✓ If I'm in a really sociable mood, then I like urban views.

Remove unnecessary fillers and the extra comma. The indefinite article 'a' before 'really sociable mood' is optional but acceptable; removing the comma improves fluency. This is mainly a sentence structure/fluency issue; simplify to avoid hesitation words. Grammar problem type ID:26

× But if I'm in like a depression movie, then I like a rural areas because they are calming and I have a, my own space.

✓ But if I'm in a depressive mood, then I prefer rural areas because they are calming and I have my own space.

'Depression movie' is incorrect; use 'depressive mood' or 'feeling down'. 'A rural areas' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use plural 'rural areas' or singular 'a rural area'. 'I have a, my own space' contains hesitations and an extra article; use 'I have my own space'. Suggestion: choose correct noun phrase ('depressive mood') and ensure article agrees with singular/plural noun. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I think Kyrgyzstan has a beautiful nature. That's why I will always choose my own country, my own city.

✓ I think Kyrgyzstan has beautiful nature. That's why I would always choose my own country and my own city.

'Beautiful nature' is more natural than 'a beautiful nature'. The second sentence uses 'will always choose' which suggests certainty in future; 'would always choose' is softer and more appropriate in hypothetical/preference contexts. Also 'my own country, my own city' is repetitive; 'and' connects them properly. Suggestion: adjust article use with uncountable nouns and use 'would' for preferences. Grammar problem type ID:7

× But uh, although I think views in other countries are beautiful too.

✓ But I also think views in other countries are beautiful.

The original starts with both 'But' and 'although', creating a fragment/contradiction. Combine into a coherent sentence: 'I also think' is concise and avoids the subordinate clause fragment. Suggestion: avoid starting a sentence with contradictory conjunctions simultaneously and ensure the sentence has a main clause. Grammar problem type ID:16