Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation and filler words, make answer more concise and complete. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and finish the thought (why you share on social media).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel I experiment with angles and natural light to capture striking landscapes and cityscapes, which helps me improve my photography skills. I often share the best shots with friends and on social media because I like getting feedback and keeping memories organized.

提案: This answer is clear, structured and specific. To improve further, add a linking phrase to contrast briefly with urban views and avoid minor grammar errors (use singular 'countryside'). Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I prefer rural views because the fresh air, wide-open spaces and natural sounds help me unwind from city life. For example, I visit the countryside once a month to stroll along the riverbank and listen to bird songs, which I find very relaxing compared with noisy urban streets.

提案: Eliminate repetition and hesitations, correct grammar ('country' singular) and complete the contrast sentence. Begin with a clear statement, give one specific reason with an example, then briefly acknowledge the alternative using a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they make me feel connected to my childhood—local mountains remind me of family trips. However, I also enjoy scenery abroad because different landscapes and cultures offer fresh photographic opportunities.

× I love capturing uh, sceneries and stunning landscapes and cityscapes with uh, Whenever I travel, I often uh, experiment with different angles and lighting to create an interesting shot. I also enjoy sharing it with my friends and on social media because.

✓ I love capturing scenery, stunning landscapes, and cityscapes. Whenever I travel, I often experiment with different angles and lighting to create interesting shots. I also enjoy sharing them with my friends and on social media.

Errors: 'sceneries' is an incorrect plural for scenery (uncountable) and 'it' does not agree with plural 'shots/scenes'. Also run-on sentence and unnecessary filler words. Suggestions: use 'scenery' (uncountable) or 'scenes'/'landscapes', make sentences separate for clarity, and use the plural pronoun 'them' to refer to multiple photos or shots. Grammar problem type ID:10 relates to present participle issues manifested by incorrect noun/pronoun agreement with gerund phrases; however the primary corrections follow the 'Verb in the present participle form' guidance by fixing noun forms and pronouns to match the participle ideas.

× Personally, I prefer rural views because the fresh air, wide open spaces and natural sounds help me unwind from city life.

✓ Personally, I prefer rural views because the fresh air, wide-open spaces, and natural sounds help me unwind from city life.

Error: 'wide open' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun ('wide-open spaces'). Suggestions: add the hyphen for correct adjective form and use commas in a series for clarity.

× For example, I visit the countrysides once a month to stroll along the riverbank, listen to bird songs and feel the gentle breeze, which I find very relaxing and restorative.

✓ For example, I visit the countryside once a month to stroll along the riverbank, listen to birdsong, and feel the gentle breeze, which I find very relaxing and restorative.

Errors: 'countrysides' is unusual — 'the countryside' is the correct uncountable noun. 'bird songs' can be written as 'birdsong' (uncountable) or 'birdsongs'; both are acceptable but 'birdsong' is idiomatic. Suggestions: use 'the countryside' and 'birdsong' for naturalness and correct noun usage.

× Personally, I prefer the views in my own countries because I feel personally attached to them and they bring me back my childhood memories.

✓ Personally, I prefer the views in my own country because I feel personally attached to them and they bring back my childhood memories.

Errors: 'countries' should be singular 'country' when referring to 'my own country'. Also 'bring me back my childhood memories' is unidiomatic; correct phrase is 'bring back my childhood memories' or 'remind me of my childhood'. Suggestions: use singular 'country' and the idiomatic verb phrase 'bring back'.

× For example, seeing the local mountains always reminds me of the family trips.

✓ For example, seeing the local mountains always reminds me of family trips.

Error: 'the family trips' is overly specific; 'family trips' is more natural unless referring to particular trips. Suggestion: drop 'the' for general reference or specify which trips if definite meaning is intended.

× Although I also enjoy scenery umm abroad for the different landscapes and cultures they show in.

✓ Although I also enjoy scenery abroad because of the different landscapes and cultures.

Errors: Sentence is incomplete and contains filler 'umm' and awkward ending 'they show in.' Suggestions: remove filler words, use 'because of' to link reason, and end the sentence with the noun phrase 'different landscapes and cultures' for clarity.