Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and directly addresses the question, and you provide reasons and an example (sharing on social media). To improve, make responses slightly more concise and vary vocabulary (avoid repetition of “places” and “photos”), and include one specific example to make it more vivid. Also watch small grammatical points like 'in social media' → 'on social media'.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially while traveling. It helps me recall specific trips, like the mountain sunrise I photographed in Nepal, and I usually post a few favorite shots on social media to share with friends.

提案: Good direct answer and supporting details. Improve by correcting small word choice errors ('sideline' is incorrect here) and tightening phrases. Use clearer linking words (for example, 'also' is fine) and give a brief specific example of an urban view you like to strengthen the answer.

例: I definitely prefer urban views because the skyline at night, with its lights and varied architecture, feels thrilling. For example, I love photographing rooftop panoramas of the downtown skyline and quiet city parks that contrast with the busy streets.

提案: The answer is relevant and shows balance, but contains an unclear phrase ('while off') and is slightly vague. Improve by replacing unclear wording, adding a linking word for contrast, and giving one concrete example of a local and a foreign view to make the response more specific and memorable.

例: I enjoy both local and foreign views. On the one hand, I appreciate familiar landscapes like my hometown riverbank for its peacefulness; on the other hand, I love exploring foreign cities, such as photographing Madrid’s plazas when I travel abroad.

× I often share the photos with my friends in social media.

✓ I often share the photos with my friends on social media.

Use of preposition: English collocates 'on' with 'social media' (not 'in'). Use 'on social media' to indicate the platform where you share content.

× There's something about the city sideline skyline at night with all the lights and interesting architecture that I find really exciting.

✓ There's something about the city's skyline at night, with all the lights and interesting architecture, that I find really exciting.

Word choice and sentence structure: 'city sideline skyline' is incorrect and redundant. Use the possessive form 'city's skyline' to show the skyline belongs to the city. Commas clarify the modifying phrase 'with all the lights and interesting architecture.' This produces a grammatically correct and natural sentence.

× I enjoy both local and foreign views.

✓ I enjoy both local and foreign views.

This sentence is already correct; no preposition change needed. It is included here to indicate no correction is required.

× Each place has its own unique charm, so sometimes I appreciate the comfort of familiar scenery while off.

✓ Each place has its own unique charm, so sometimes I appreciate the comfort of familiar scenery when I am at home.

Incorrect or missing expression: 'while off' is not a natural English phrase. Replace with a clear clause such as 'when I am at home' to contrast familiar scenery with travel. This fixes meaning and sentence structure.

× I definitely prefer urban views.

✓ I definitely prefer urban views.

This sentence is already grammatically correct; no present participle change is required. It is included to confirm correct usage.

× Other times I crave the excitement of exploring somewhere completely new.

✓ Other times, I crave the excitement of exploring somewhere completely new.

Punctuation and sentence flow: Adding a comma after 'Other times' improves readability. The sentence is otherwise correct; the change is stylistic to match spoken coherence.