Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: correct grammar (e.g., 'nature' not 'natures'), use one clear topic sentence and 1–2 supporting details, avoid redundancy. Use linking words for coherence (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Also watch small word-choice errors ('beside' → 'besides').

例: Yes — I really enjoy photographing different views, especially nature. I often visit the countryside to unwind and get fresh air, and I take photos to remember the scenery and capture peaceful moments.

提案: Clarify meaning and fix mistakes: remove unclear words (e.g., 'Christine' is incorrect), combine ideas with linking words, and give one specific reason or example. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and use accurate vocabulary ('rural areas' or 'the countryside').

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside is more charming and peaceful. For example, wide fields and quiet woodlands help me relax and feel refreshed after a busy week.

提案: Make the answer clearer and grammatically correct: state your preference directly, give one specific reason, and avoid repetition. Use linking words ('however', 'because') and correct phrase order ('the southern part of my country has fewer natural landscapes' or the opposite). Be specific about what you like abroad.

例: I prefer visiting other countries to discover different natural landscapes because I enjoy seeing unfamiliar mountains or coastlines. However, my country’s cities are very vibrant and full of buildings, so travelling abroad lets me experience scenery I don’t see at home.

× I like taking photos of different views, especially natures.

✓ I like taking photos of different views, especially natural scenery.

The word 'natures' is incorrect here. 'Nature' as a concept is uncountable and we need an adjective+noun phrase: 'natural scenery' or 'natural views'. Replace 'natures' with 'natural scenery' to be grammatically correct and natural. Suggestion: use 'natural scenery' or 'nature' (uncountable) depending on context.

× I usually visit the countryside on a regular basis to unwind and get some fresh air.

✓ I usually visit the countryside regularly to unwind and get some fresh air.

'on a regular basis' is not incorrect but wordy when combined with 'usually'. Using both is redundant. Change to 'regularly' or keep 'on a regular basis'. Also 'the countryside' is correct here. Suggestion: use one frequency expression ('usually' or 'regularly' or 'on a regular basis').

× Beside, I like to take photos to remember scenery.

✓ Besides, I like to take photos to remember the scenery.

Use 'Besides' (with s) to add information. Also 'scenery' as a noun here needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to the scenery previously mentioned. Suggestion: use 'Besides' and add 'the' before 'scenery'.

× I prefer the scenery in the countryside.

✓ I prefer the scenery in the countryside.

Sentence is already correct. No change needed. (Included to confirm no grammar error.)

× I believe that the rural area is more charming because it's Christine, it's nature, it can boost energy and calm the soul.

✓ I believe that the rural area is more charming because it's natural and can boost energy and calm the soul.

'Christine' appears to be a mistaken word; likely intended 'serene' or 'beautiful' or 'natural'. Using 'it's natural' or 'it's serene' fits the meaning. Also remove the repeated 'it's' before 'nature' and combine ideas: 'it's natural' or 'it brings you closer to nature'. Suggestion: use 'serene' or 'natural' and combine clauses for clarity.

× I prefer to travel to another country to discover the nature because our country, especially the southern part of our country likes to most natural landscapes and instead there is a lot of building and vibrant of the city.

✓ I prefer to travel to other countries to discover nature because our country, especially the southern part, has fewer natural landscapes and instead has many buildings and a vibrant city life.

Multiple errors: 'travel to another country' -> 'travel to other countries' (plural preference generalization) or keep singular depending on meaning. 'discover the nature' should be 'discover nature' (uncountable, no 'the'). 'our country ... likes to most natural landscapes' is ungrammatical: subject-verb agreement and word order are wrong. Use 'has fewer natural landscapes' to express lack. 'instead there is a lot of building and vibrant of the city' should be 'instead has many buildings and a vibrant city life'. Suggestion: restructure sentence: 'I prefer to travel to other countries to experience nature, because in our country, especially the south, there are fewer natural landscapes and more buildings and vibrant city life.'