Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms (e.g., 'pictures', 'because I want to see them in the future', 'I like to show them to my friends').

例: I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I want to remember places I visit. For example, I photograph landscapes so I can look back at them later, and I often share the best shots with my friends.

提案: Answer directly and avoid unclear comparisons. State a clear preference (urban or rural), give a specific reason and use linking words like 'however' or 'because'. Fix grammar and reduce repetition.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the mix of architecture and lively streets. For instance, city skylines and historic buildings offer interesting details I can photograph and share with friends.

提案: Give a clear, concise preference and support it with specific examples and one reason. Use correct singular/plural forms and smoother linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid repeating the same phrase.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse scenery, such as mountains, forests and historic villages. For example, the ancient houses and scenic roads near my hometown are particularly photogenic and meaningful to me.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views because it I want to see in the future and I want to take picture in different views because I love to show my taking pictures views to my friends.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I want to see them in the future, and I want to take pictures of different views because I love to show my photos to my friends.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when referring to more than one; 'view' should be plural 'views' after 'different'; use 'see them' to refer back to 'pictures' (pronoun agreement). Also 'taking pictures views' is incorrect word order and redundant; use 'my photos' or 'my pictures'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and keep pronoun reference clear.

× Yes, I prefer building urban areas and in rural areas because I love to view in urban areas then rural areas.

✓ I prefer urban areas to rural ones because I like looking at urban views more than rural ones.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and word order: 'prefer building urban areas and in rural areas' is ungrammatical. Use 'prefer X to Y' structure and compare preferences with 'more than'. Also 'building urban areas' is unclear; use 'urban areas' and 'rural ones'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer A to B' and 'more than' for comparisons, and keep nouns parallel.

× I love to see my friends what I got a beautiful view and I want to tell my friends that also.

✓ I love to show my friends the beautiful views I find, and I want to tell them about them as well.

The phrase 'see my friends what I got' misuses 'see' and 'what'; use 'show my friends the views I find' and use pronoun 'them' to refer to 'views'. Also avoid repeating 'my friends' by using 'them'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs for actions (show, tell) and clear pronoun references.

× It was very beautiful and realistic.

✓ They are very beautiful and realistic.

Context refers to views or pictures generally, so present tense 'are' is more appropriate. Also 'it' is unclear; plural subjects 'views' or 'pictures' require 'they'. Suggestion: Match verb number and tense to the subject (plural views -> they are).

× I prefer beauty in my own countries than other because in my country there is lots of beautiful views like mountains, jungles, forests and beautiful roads and with beautiful ancient times houses.

✓ I prefer the beauty of my own country to others because there are lots of beautiful sights like mountains, jungles, forests, scenic roads, and old houses.

Use singular 'country' when referring to one's own nation; 'countries' was incorrect. Use 'prefer A to B' structure. 'There is lots' should be 'there are lots' because 'sights' is plural. 'Ancient times houses' is awkward; use 'old houses' or 'historic houses'. Suggestion: Keep country singular when referring to your own, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose natural adjective-noun combinations.

× So that's why I like prefer views in my own countries than other.

✓ So that's why I prefer views in my own country to those in other countries.

Don't use both 'like' and 'prefer' together; choose 'prefer'. Use singular 'country' for 'my own country' and structure 'prefer A to B'. 'Other' should be 'other countries' or 'those in other countries' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'prefer A to B' and ensure singular/plural nouns match the meaning.