Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and contractions like "wanna" in formal speech. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "also" or "for example").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I especially like capturing natural landscapes such as forests and lakes because of their colors and light, and I also photograph historical buildings when I visit old towns to record interesting architectural details.

提案: Give a direct comparison with clear reasons and complete sentences. Use linking words like "on the one hand" and "on the other hand" and provide specific examples. Avoid unfinished phrases and vague words like "we have a good."

例: I like both urban and rural views. On the one hand, urban areas appeal to me because I enjoy photographing modern developments and city skylines; on the other hand, rural areas are attractive for their peaceful landscapes and traditional farms, which provide interesting textures and colors.

提案: Answer directly and avoid hesitations. State a clear preference or say you have no strong preference, then give two specific reasons with linking words like "because" or "for example." Avoid vague phrases such as "and so on."

例: I don't have a strong preference: I enjoy views in my own country because they are familiar and often full of cultural meaning, but I also like views abroad because they let me observe different lifestyles and architectural styles, for example colorful markets or modern city centers.

× Yes I do. Personally I am a big fan of nature and always I would like to take pictures of nature or maybe sometimes when I visit any old places I wanna take picture of the old things.

✓ Yes, I do. Personally, I am a big fan of nature and I always like to take pictures of natural scenes, or sometimes when I visit old places I want to take pictures of historical things.

Problems: adverb placement ('always' should be placed before the main verb phrase), informal contraction 'wanna' inappropriate in a test, repetition and awkward phrasing ('take pictures of nature' repeated). Suggestion: Place adverbs near verbs ('I always like'), use standard vocabulary ('want' not 'wanna'), eliminate repetition and use clearer nouns ('natural scenes', 'historical things'). Suggested Grammar Problem Type ID:20 (Incorrect adverb placement) and 26 (Sentence structure).

× Personally, I like both urban areas and rural areas and urban areas we have a new developments or the best developments, I like to take picture of those and in rural areas we have a good.

✓ Personally, I like both urban and rural areas. In urban areas we have new developments, and I like to take pictures of those. In rural areas we have pleasant scenery.

Problems: incorrect article and noun number ('a new developments' mixes singular article with plural noun), missing article before 'picture' and wrong singular/plural ('take picture' -> 'take pictures'), sentence fragments and vague ending ('we have a good'). Suggestion: Match articles to noun number ('new developments' no 'a'), use plural for general activities ('take pictures'), break into separate sentences for clarity and complete the thought with a suitable noun ('pleasant scenery'). Suggested Grammar Problem Type ID:22 (Article errors) and 1 (Singular and plural issue).

× I like, uh, my country's views, but also I like other countries. We used to, uh, to see their cultures, their developments, their way to life, to live and so on.

✓ I like my country's views, but I also enjoy those of other countries. We can see their cultures, their developments, and their ways of life when we visit.

Problems: unnecessary filler words and comma misuse, incorrect use of 'used to' and extra 'to' ('We used to, uh, to see' is wrong), awkward noun phrase 'way to life'. Suggestion: Remove fillers, use appropriate verb ('can see' or 'we see when we visit') rather than 'used to' which implies past habit, and correct the noun phrase to 'ways of life'. Suggested Grammar Problem Type ID:8 (Verb + -ing form) is not directly applicable; primary issues are 26 (Sentence structure) and 6 (Present tense issue) because tense and structure are incorrect.