Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ слишком общий и содержит некоторые грамматические неточности. Стоит начать с прямого утверждения, сократить повторения и добавить одно-два конкретных примера, чтобы сделать ответ более естественным и убедительным. Также исправьте фразу "capture it" на согласование по числу и уточните, кто даёт оценку вашим снимкам.

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I often spot small, beautiful moments like light on a river or patterns on building facades, and I try to capture them carefully. For example, last month I photographed a sunrise over the city skyline and my friends praised the composition and colour balance.

提案: Ответ содержит смысл, но выражения звучат немного неестественно (например, "significant adventures", "boundary spaces"). Нужно использовать более подходящую лексику, связки и привести одно конкретное отличие между городскими и сельскими видами. Ограничьте ответ до 2–4 предложений и свяжите идеи словами вроде "however" или "on the other hand".

例: I enjoy photographing both urban and rural scenes. In cities I focus on historical and modern architecture because of the interesting shapes and contrasts, while in the countryside I prefer open fields and rustic details for their peaceful atmosphere. On the other hand, urban scenes often offer stronger lines and colours that work well in photos.

提案: Ответ выражает идею, но в нём есть ошибки согласования и немного расплывчатые формулировки (например, "They also give me exciting experience"). Стоит прямо ответить на вопрос, затем привести причину и конкретный пример, и исправить грамматику (например, "it also gives me an exciting experience").

例: I usually prefer scenic views in other countries because travelling exposes me to different cultures and landscapes. For example, I loved photographing coastal villages in Portugal as they were very different from what I usually see at home. Still, my own country also offers many picturesque places, like mountain ranges that I often revisit.

× Photography is one of my favorite hobbies. I can notice beautiful moments and capture it in a really professional way according to opinions of my friends and photographers.

✓ Photography is one of my favorite hobbies. I can notice beautiful moments and capture them in a really professional way, according to my friends and other photographers.

The sentence has a pronoun-number agreement and phrasing issue rather than an -ing form error, but under the allowed list the main corrections involve matching plural pronoun 'them' to plural 'moments' and improving wording 'according to my friends and other photographers'. Use 'them' because 'moments' is plural; add a comma before the attribution and use 'other photographers' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Always match pronouns to the noun number and place attribution at the end of the clause for clarity.

× Both of these areas have significant adventures.

✓ Both of these areas offer significant opportunities for adventure.

The original uses 'significant adventures' awkwardly; 'offer significant opportunities for adventure' is more natural. 'Both of these areas' is acceptable, but 'adventures' as a count noun with 'significant' sounds odd here. Suggestion: Use 'opportunities for adventure' or 'many adventures' depending on intended meaning.

× The historical and modern buildings catch my eye in urban areas.

✓ Historical and modern buildings catch my eye in urban areas.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary when speaking generally about types of buildings. Use the plural noun without 'the' to express a general preference. Suggestion: Omit 'the' when making general statements about categories.

× However, boundary spaces capture my attention in rural areas.

✓ However, open spaces on the outskirts capture my attention in rural areas.

'Boundary spaces' is unclear and uncommon; 'on the outskirts' or 'open spaces on the outskirts' better conveys rural boundary areas. Also 'capture my attention' is fine. Suggestion: Use common collocations like 'open spaces', 'on the outskirts', or 'rural landscapes' for clarity.

× Therefore, I like taking pictures of these both views.

✓ Therefore, I like taking pictures of both of these views.

The phrase 'these both views' has incorrect word order. Use 'both of these views' or 'these two views'. This fixes word order and clarity. Suggestion: Use 'both of these' before the noun or 'these two'.

× The major goal of my life is to visit as many countries as I can.

✓ The major goal of my life is to visit as many countries as I can.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present-future meaning (a present goal about future actions). No change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is.

× Therefore, I prefer views in foreign countries because they broaden my horizons.

✓ Therefore, I prefer views in foreign countries because they broaden my horizons.

This sentence is correct; 'they' appropriately refers to 'views'. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep consistent plural pronoun references.

× However, I live in a big and picturesque country. They also give me exciting experience.

✓ However, I live in a big and picturesque country. It also gives me exciting experiences.

The pronoun 'They' incorrectly refers to singular 'country'; use 'It'. Also 'experience' should be plural or countable here: 'exciting experiences' or 'an exciting experience'. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches the noun and choose singular/plural noun form appropriately.