Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Usa frasi più fluide e correggi piccoli errori grammaticali; rendi il contenuto più specifico con un esempio concreto e limita a massimo 3–4 frasi. Ad esempio, evita ripetizioni come "really" e "really" e usa articoli corretti (es. "taking pictures of it" → "taking pictures of it").

例: Yes — I enjoy photographing everyday scenes around me. For example, I often take photos of the light on my street at sunset because it changes the colours and mood of the buildings. This helps me capture small, beautiful moments in daily life.

提案: Sii più conciso e usa collegamenti per rendere le frasi più coerenti; evita aggettivi ripetuti ("beautiful, amazing") e fornisci dettagli specifici come il momento della giornata o la tecnica fotografica. Mantieni la risposta entro 3 frasi.

例: I prefer rural views because they feel calmer and more varied. For instance, I like photographing sunsets over the sea in the evening and the silhouette of the mountains near my home, which create strong contrasts and colours in my pictures.

提案: Correggi grammatica e costruzione delle frasi (es. "my country offers spectacular views"), evita ripetizioni e sii più preciso: citi esempi concreti e confronti brevi con altri paesi. Mantieni massimo 3 frasi e usa connettivi per coerenza.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Italy offers a wide variety of landscapes. For example, I can photograph the clear lakes, the dramatic Dolomites and coastal scenes all within a few hours' drive, which gives me many different photography opportunities.

× I think that the world is really amazing, the reality around us, so it is really worth taking picture of it.

✓ I think that the world is really amazing, the reality around us, so it is really worth taking a picture of it.

The error is the omission of the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'picture'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Suggestion: use 'a picture' or plural 'pictures' depending on meaning; here 'a picture of it' fits the sentence.

× According to my view of my country offers a spectacular views that are different to find in other countries.

✓ In my view, my country offers spectacular views that are hard to find in other countries.

Several issues: 'view' singular conflicts with plural 'views' — use 'views' after 'spectacular'. 'According to my view of' is awkward; 'In my view' is the natural expression. 'Different to find' is incorrect; use 'hard to find' or 'difficult to find'. Suggestion: simplify to 'In my view, my country offers spectacular views that are hard to find in other countries.'

× I think that here in Italy we have a very beautiful lakes, beautiful mountains such as the Dolomites and also the sea.

✓ I think that here in Italy we have very beautiful lakes, beautiful mountains such as the Dolomites, and also the sea.

The phrase 'a very beautiful lakes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'lakes'. Remove 'a' when using the plural 'lakes'. Also add a comma before 'and also the sea' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'very beautiful lakes' or change to singular 'a very beautiful lake' if only one lake is meant.

× So I think that you can take a variety of different pictures with different scenes.

✓ So I think you can take a variety of different pictures depicting different scenes.

The original is understandable but a bit redundant and slightly awkward: 'a variety of different pictures with different scenes' repeats 'different'. Better structure is 'a variety of different pictures depicting different scenes' or simply 'a variety of pictures of different scenes'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use a clear verb like 'depict' or preposition 'of'.