Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваша відповідь природна і зрозуміла, але потребує кращої організації та стислості. Почніть з чіткої теми (topic sentence), уникайте повторів і заповнювачів («umm», «so»), покращіть використання артиклів та множини (наприклад, «the photographing course» → «a photography course», «the picture» → «pictures»). Додайте одне конкретне прикладне речення про те, що саме ви любите фотографувати, використовуючи зв’язки (for example, because, when) і тримайтеся не більше 3–4 речень.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I recently took a photography course, which helped me improve my composition and lighting techniques. For example, when I travel I like capturing landscapes and city skylines because they often show unique colors and moods.

提案: Відповідь містить помилки вимови/лексики («Are prefabius») і багато заповнювачів. Потрібно починати з чіткої теми («I prefer rural areas») і пояснювати причини з підтримкою зв'язками (because, for example). Наведіть конкретні деталі, які ви фотографуєте в селі (наприклад, поля, річки, традиційні будинки) і уникайте загальних фраз. Дотримуйтесь максимум 3–4 речень і уникайте повторів.

例: I prefer rural areas because they are less crowded and offer more natural scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing rolling fields, rivers, and old cottages, which often have interesting textures and colors. This makes composing unique shots much easier.

提案: Відповідь чітка за змістом, але є зайві заповнювачі і повтори («umm», «uh», «because» двічі). Краще сформулювати коротку тему («I prefer views abroad») і підкріпити її конкретними причинами або прикладами (наприклад, архітектура, культура, світло). Уникайте категоричних фраз типу «not interesting at all» — замініть їх на конкретні пояснення. Обмежтеся 2–3 реченнями.

例: I prefer views abroad because foreign places often have different architecture and cultural scenes that feel more exotic to me. For instance, I love photographing colorful markets and historic buildings overseas because they offer fresh perspectives compared to familiar local scenery.

× Actually I took recently the photographing course.

✓ Actually I recently took a photography course.

The original sentence uses an incorrect word order and a nonstandard noun form. Place the adverb 'recently' before the main verb for natural English: 'I recently took.' Use the noun 'photography' instead of 'photographing' and the common collocation 'photography course' instead of 'the photographing course'. Suggestion: Practice placing time adverbs (recently, already, just) close to the verb: 'I recently took a course.'

× So most of the time, especially during travel, I really enjoy taking the picture.

✓ So most of the time, especially when traveling, I really enjoy taking pictures.

The phrase 'taking the picture' incorrectly uses the definite article and singular 'picture' when speaking generally. Use plural 'pictures' for general actions and 'when traveling' is a more natural expression than 'during travel'. Suggestion: Use plural without 'the' for habitual actions: 'I enjoy taking pictures.'

× Are prefabius in rural areas umm, because they are not so overwhelmed with people and concrete structures?

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are not so crowded with people and concrete buildings.

The original sentence has incorrect word order ('Are prefabius') and a nonstandard adjective 'prefabius'. Replace with 'I prefer' and correct vocabulary: 'crowded' instead of 'overwhelmed with people' and 'buildings' or 'concrete structures' is acceptable but 'concrete buildings' is more natural. Also remove the question mark because this is a statement. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb order for statements: 'I prefer rural areas because...'. Use common collocations: 'crowded with people'.

× Uh, so there are a lot of different landscapes and I really enjoy taking a photo.

✓ Uh, so there are a lot of different landscapes and I really enjoy taking photos.

Using 'a photo' suggests a single photograph; for a general habit use plural 'photos'. Also 'a lot of different landscapes' is correct but pairs better with 'photos'. Suggestion: Use plural when talking about habitual actions: 'I enjoy taking photos.'

× I prefer views in another country because for me it, umm, seems more exotic and unusual.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because, to me, they seem more exotic and unusual.

Mismatch between singular/plural and word order: 'another country' is singular while 'views' is plural; use 'other countries' to match 'views'. Also replace 'for me it seems' with natural phrasing 'to me, they seem' and ensure pronoun 'they' matches 'views'. Suggestion: Match number between subject and pronoun: 'views... they'. Use 'to me' for opinions: 'to me, they seem...'.

× Uh, because I used to see the same picture in my country around me, so it's not interesting for me at all.

✓ Because I used to see the same scenes in my country, it's not interesting to me at all.

'See the same picture around me' is unnatural. Use 'used to see the same scenes' for repeated past experiences. 'Interesting to me' is the natural collocation rather than 'interesting for me'. Also removing the filler 'so' improves clarity. Suggestion: Use 'scenes' for views/landscapes and collocation 'interesting to me'.