Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition; use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Improve grammatical accuracy (e.g., articles, plural/singular, verb forms) and sentence variety. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'for instance', 'also').

例: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often capture landscapes and sunsets, and sometimes I create time-lapse sequences of sunrises when I travel to scenic locations to preserve memories.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer and avoid filler words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'rural areas give', 'a sense of') and remove repetition. Provide one or two specific reasons with linking words ('because', 'for example') and concrete details (e.g., 'mountains, farms, quiet roads').

例: I prefer rural areas because they give me a sense of peace and opportunity to photograph natural scenes. For example, I enjoy shooting mountains, farmland and quiet country roads, which feel more relaxed than busy cities.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Improve cohesion by using linking words ('because', 'also') and correct collocations ('sunrises', 'sunsets', 'visit different places'). Add a brief specific reason or example to support preference.

例: I prefer views in my own country because the landscapes are beautiful and I can share them with my family. For instance, I often watch sunrises and sunsets at nearby beaches and sometimes travel to new regions to photograph unique scenes.

× I definitely like to take pictures of different views.

✓ I definitely like taking pictures of different views.

After verbs expressing preference such as 'like', English commonly uses the gerund (verb + -ing) to indicate a general habit or enjoyment. Both 'like to take' and 'like taking' can be correct, but 'like taking' is more natural when describing a general preference for an activity.

× I generally like to capture landscapes, photos of sunsets and I also love to capture a time lapse of the morning sunrise and I go and travel to the different places to capture a moments for my memories.

✓ I generally like capturing landscapes and photos of sunsets, and I also love taking time-lapse videos of morning sunrises; I travel to different places to capture moments for my memories.

The original sentence is overly long and contains several structure issues: inconsistent verb forms, unnecessary repetition of 'capture', incorrect article usage ('a moments'), and awkward coordination. Breaking into clearer clauses and using consistent gerund forms (capturing, taking) improves flow. Use 'time-lapse videos' and plural 'sunrises' for natural phrasing; 'capture moments' (no article) is correct.

× I definitely prefer views in rural areas because we rural areas gives me a piece of, uh, life and a piece of time where I can capture the different, different views of such such as mountains, landscapes and the road lifestyle, which I really love.

✓ I definitely prefer views in rural areas because rural areas give me a sense of life and time where I can capture different views such as mountains, landscapes, and road life, which I really love.

Problems fixed: incorrect subject 'we rural areas' should be 'rural areas' and requires plural verb 'give' (subject-verb agreement). 'A piece of life' is unnatural; 'a sense of life' or 'a sense of peace' is clearer. Removed repetition and corrected phrase 'road lifestyle' to 'road life'. Also matched plural nouns and verbs.

× And I love to, uh, stay there and capture my movement, capture the movements for my memories.

✓ I also love staying there and capturing moments for my memories.

Original uses incorrect and confusing phrase 'capture my movement' and redundant repetition. Use gerund forms for parallel structure and 'capturing moments' is the intended idea. 'For my memories' is acceptable but 'for memories' or 'to keep as memories' are alternatives.

× Yes, I prefer views of my own country because my own country is very beautiful and I love to stay here with my family together and I love to see the sunset, sunset and morning rise, both of the views and I want I may love to visit and different places to capture new things.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in my own country because it is very beautiful and I enjoy staying here with my family. I love watching sunsets and sunrises, and I would also like to visit different places to capture new things.

The original sentence has repetition ('my own country'), awkward phrasing ('stay here with my family together'), repeated words ('sunset, sunset'), incorrect phrase 'morning rise' which should be 'sunrise', and ungrammatical clause 'I want I may love to visit and different places'. Splitting into two sentences and using correct verb forms ('watching', 'would like to visit') clarifies meaning and fixes tense/modal issues.