Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear, but a bit wordy and repetitive. Aim for a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases (e.g., 'show them' and 'share them'). Also watch minor grammar (e.g., 'the places that I visited' → 'places I visited').

例: Yes, I love photographing different views, especially when I travel. For example, I capture landscapes and city scenes to create albums that I share with my family so they can see what I experienced.

提案: Your answer addresses both options but lacks a clear preference and uses repetitive language ('really beautiful', 'even'). Start with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons and one contrasting point using linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand'.

例: I prefer urban views because modern architecture and nighttime lights are striking. However, on the other hand, rural scenery appeals to me during the day for its tranquillity and natural beauty.

提案: Your answer tries to explain a preference but has several issues: the question asks about 'own country or other countries' but you responded about rural vs urban (off-topic). Also there are grammatical errors ('open a open spaces', 'of the room') and some repetition. Make sure to answer the actual question directly, use a topic sentence stating preference (own country or abroad), then give specific reasons with correct grammar.

例: I prefer views in other countries because travelling abroad lets me experience different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I enjoy seeing foreign countryside and coastal scenery, which often feels more exotic and memorable than familiar views at home.

× I like to keep the pictures of the places that I visited and show them to my family and share them to my friends so that they can see what I've experienced.

✓ I like to keep the pictures of the places that I visited and show them to my family and share them with my friends so that they can see what I've experienced.

The phrase 'share to my friends' uses the wrong preposition. In English, 'share' is typically followed by 'with' to indicate the person you are sharing something with. Use 'share with my friends'. Suggestion: Use 'share with' when indicating the recipient (e.g., 'share them with my friends').

× Urban areas are really modern with buildings.

✓ Urban areas are really modern with many buildings.

The original sentence is grammatical but sounds incomplete; adding a quantifier clarifies the plural noun 'buildings'. Without it the sentence is acceptable, but native usage more commonly includes a word like 'many' or 'tall' to describe multiple buildings. Suggestion: Use 'many buildings' or another modifier to clearly refer to multiple structures.

× I prefer rural areas because countryside offers peaceful open a open spaces and rolling fields where you can actually see the stars at night, which feels really relaxing.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the countryside offers peaceful, open spaces and rolling fields where you can actually see the stars at night, which feels really relaxing.

Several article and word-order issues: 'countryside' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the general rural area as a concept. The phrase 'peaceful open a open spaces' is ungrammatical and contains a duplicated 'open' and misplaced 'a'. Also add a comma between coordinate adjectives 'peaceful, open'. Suggestion: Use 'the countryside' and write 'peaceful, open spaces'.

× but I prefer calm and natural scenery of the room.

✓ but I prefer calm and natural scenery of the countryside.

The phrase 'scenery of the room' is incorrect in meaning and uses the wrong noun; 'room' refers to an indoor space, which contradicts the intended rural scenery. A pronoun error in context: the speaker likely meant 'the countryside' or 'rural areas'. Replace 'room' with 'the countryside' or 'rural areas' to match context. Suggestion: Use a noun consistent with rural scenery, e.g., 'the countryside'.