Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the small grammar error in the first sentence, avoid redundancy and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Add one linking phrase to connect ideas clearly. Be specific about the types of views or situations you photograph to enrich content.

例: Absolutely. Whenever I travel, I capture scenic vistas and local nature—especially mountains at dawn and coastal sunsets—because photos help me remember special moments. Also, I organize them in online albums by trip, so I can easily revisit and share my favorite shots with friends.

提案: Good structure and specific details. Improve coherence by using linking words and correcting minor phrasing (e.g., 'long lasting' -> 'long-lasting'). Keep sentences varied and concise; avoid starting sentences with 'Like' in formal speech.

例: I don't have a strong preference because each offers something different. In the countryside, I love photographing mountains at sunrise since the soft light creates a peaceful, long-lasting memory. On the other hand, in cities I enjoy capturing lively streets and distinctive architecture for their energy and photographic variety.

提案: There is a content error: you mention 'music' instead of 'views' and some agreement errors ('they feel' -> 'they feel' refers to views). Fix the vocabulary mistake and be more specific about examples from home and abroad. Use linking words to contrast clearly.

例: I enjoy views in my own country because familiar landscapes and landmarks evoke personal memories. However, I also love scenes abroad because different countries offer unique architecture and cultural atmospheres. So overall, I appreciate both for different reasons.

× Is absolutely.

✓ It is absolutely.

The sentence is missing a subject pronoun. In English, declarative sentences require an explicit subject. The student likely intended to say 'It is absolutely' or more naturally 'Absolutely' or 'Yes, absolutely.' Suggestion: use 'Yes, absolutely.' or 'Absolutely.' depending on formality.

× Well, I enjoy music in my own country because they feel familiar and often feature landscapes or landmarks I grew up with.

✓ Well, I enjoy music in my own country because it feels familiar and often features landscapes or landmarks I grew up with.

The pronoun 'they' refers to a plural antecedent, but 'music' is uncountable and treated as singular, so the singular pronoun 'it' is required. Use 'it feels' and 'it often features' to agree with the singular noun. Alternatively, rephrase to 'Well, I enjoy music from my own country because the songs feel familiar and often feature...'.