Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms), remove hesitations, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences, e.g. give an example of what you photograph and why.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories for my future family. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines and then use those images as content for my personal photo album or social media.

提案: Respond directly and use correct vocabulary. Begin with a clear preference sentence, avoid hesitations and pronunciation errors (e.g., 'refuge' or 'rural' mistaken). Provide a specific supporting reason and a brief example, using a linking word for coherence.

例: I prefer views in the countryside because I enjoy green spaces and fresh air. For instance, I like photographing farms and rivers since they feel peaceful and help me relax.

提案: Give a direct, fluent answer with correct word choice and clearer reasons. Use one linking phrase (e.g., 'because' or 'for example') and provide a specific comparison (what is cleaner or greener) in 2–3 sentences. Remove repetitions and hesitations.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I find some foreign cities and landscapes cleaner and greener than those at home. For example, I enjoy photographing well-maintained parks and tidy streets in countries I visit because they look more picturesque.

× Yes, I am into taking picture of different views because I enjoy making memory for my future family.

✓ Yes, I am into taking pictures of different views because I enjoy making memories for my future family.

The nouns 'picture' and 'memory' need plural forms here because the speaker refers to taking multiple pictures and making multiple memories. Use 'pictures' and 'memories' or add appropriate articles if singular. Suggestion: use plural when talking about more than one item or use articles for a single item (a picture, a memory).

× In addition, I use this picture uh as a content for.

✓ In addition, I use these pictures as content for my social media.

The phrase 'use this picture as a content for' is ungrammatical: 'content' is uncountable so does not take 'a', and 'this picture' conflicts with plural context. Also the preposition 'for' needs an object (what it is for). Suggestion: match countability ('these pictures' and 'content') and include the object (e.g., 'for my social media').

× I prefer a refuse in the countryside, uh, because, uh, I, I enjoy looking for green areas and uh, I even can uh, breathe comfortably when I see this picture.

✓ I prefer a refuge in the countryside because I enjoy looking for green areas and I can even breathe comfortably when I see these pictures.

'Refuse' is the wrong word; the correct noun is 'refuge'. Also 'a refuge' is singular but later 'this picture' conflicts; context implies multiple pictures so change to 'these pictures'. The modal 'can' placement should be natural as 'I can even breathe comfortably'. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('refuge') and keep number agreement across sentence (singular vs plural).

× I prefer a refuse in the countryside, uh, because, uh, I, I enjoy looking for green areas and uh, I even can uh, breathe comfortably when I see this picture.

✓ I prefer a refuge in the countryside because I enjoy looking for green areas and I can even breathe comfortably when I see these pictures.

Also note article use: 'a refuge' is correct for singular, but if you mean the general preference for countryside views, you can omit the article and say 'I prefer refuge in the countryside' is awkward; better keep 'a refuge' or rephrase 'I prefer the countryside'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'I prefer the countryside' or keep 'a refuge' with consistent nouns.

× Honestly, I prefer reviews in other countries, uh, because uh, uh, other countries usually, uh, have uh, more in green areas and uh, uh, their cities, uh, clear, cleaner, cleaner than.

✓ Honestly, I prefer views in other countries because other countries usually have more green areas and their cities are cleaner.

'Reviews' is incorrect; the correct word is 'views'. 'More in green areas' should be 'more green areas' (no 'in'). The comparison at the end is incomplete; use 'their cities are cleaner' or 'cleaner than mine' with an object. Also ensure plural 'views' matches context. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('views') and complete comparative structures ('cleaner than + object').