Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammar errors, and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words and one specific example to support your idea. For example, correct verb forms and remove redundancy (e.g., “take care of a moment” → “capture moments”).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I like to capture special moments from different angles so I can remember them for years, for example when I photograph sunsets at the lake to preserve the colours and mood.

提案: Answer directly, then give a brief reason with specific details and use linking words for coherence. Correct article and plural usage, and name one or two concrete examples to be specific.

例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside offers more natural landscapes. For instance, I enjoy photographing mountains and rivers, where the scenery and light change dramatically throughout the day.

提案: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear statement (Yes/No), then give a concise reason with linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., “I prefer my own country to other countries”), avoid repetition, and include a short example of what you explore locally.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I can’t afford to travel abroad. Therefore I often explore nearby countryside locations, like local farms and rivers, to take interesting photos.

× I like to take care of a moment.

✓ I like to capture a moment.

The original uses 'take care of' incorrectly; 'take care of' means to look after something. The intended meaning is to capture a moment (photographically). This is not a gerund error but a lexical choice; however it fits 'Verb + -ing form' by contrast: use the base form 'capture' after 'like to'. Suggestion: use 'like to + base verb' or 'like + -ing' (e.g., 'I like capturing moments').

× I try to capture that moment in different angles and trying to save for a lifetime.

✓ I try to capture that moment from different angles and save it for a lifetime.

Two issues: parallelism and preposition. After 'try to capture' use base verb forms, so do not add 'trying' again; maintain parallel structure 'try to capture ... and save ...'. Also use preposition 'from different angles' and include object 'it' for 'save it for a lifetime'. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and include correct preposition and object.

× I prefer views in a rural area more than urban areas because there are many landscape views like mountain, Riverside and scenery I like.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas to urban areas because there are many landscapes I like, such as mountains, riversides, and beautiful scenery.

Multiple preposition and article errors: use plural 'rural areas' to match 'urban areas' and prefer 'prefer X to Y' not 'more than'. 'Landscape views like mountain' is ungrammatical: use plural nouns 'mountains' and 'riversides' and phrase 'such as' to give examples. Also reorder and add adjectives for clarity. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B', plural forms for general nouns, and 'such as' or commas for examples.

× Yes, I prefer using my country rather than other country because I'm I don't have that much money to travel outside my country so I explore my rural area in a countryside.

✓ Yes, I prefer my own country to other countries because I don't have much money to travel abroad, so I explore the countryside in my rural area.

Pronoun and determiners errors: use 'my own country' and plural 'other countries' when comparing generally. Remove duplicated 'I'm I'. Use 'don't have much money' (not 'that much' in this context) and 'travel abroad' is more natural than 'travel outside my country'. 'Explore my rural area in a countryside' is redundant; use 'explore the countryside in my rural area' or simply 'explore the countryside'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use correct comparative structures, and standard collocations like 'travel abroad' and 'the countryside'.