Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct noun/verb agreement (e.g., "these two things" not "this two thing").

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing both interesting architecture and natural scenery because they offer different moods: buildings often show cultural history, while landscapes capture light and atmosphere.

提案: Reduce hesitations and use clearer vocabulary. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific reasons with linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid informal or incorrect words like "crazier" and correct grammar ("I live in a rural area").

例: I prefer rural views because I live in a rural area of Hong Kong and enjoy the mountains and quiet harbors; for example, hiking near Sai Kung shows beautiful coastlines and forests.

提案: Avoid colloquial fillers ("'cause", "you know") and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence followed by two specific examples, using linking words ("for example", "however"). Correct grammar ("Sai Kung", "the harbour and the mountains are").

例: I prefer views in my own country because Hong Kong offers both rural and urban scenery; for example, Sai Kung has beautiful harbours and mountain trails, while Central provides iconic skyscrapers and historic streets.

× And this two thing is most of it's the things that I really like to take photos of.

✓ And these two things are mostly the kinds of things that I really like to take photos of.

The student used 'this two thing' which mixes singular demonstrative 'this' with plural noun and incorrect number agreement. Use 'these' for plural and 'things' plural; 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject. 'Most of it's the things' is ungrammatical; 'mostly the kinds of things' or 'are most of the things' is clearer. Suggestion: match demonstrative and verb to plural nouns and use 'mostly' to modify the phrase. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Since I live in a rural areas in Hong Kong, I probably would prefer to umm, prefer views in rural areas because it's crazier for me to see the natural scenery, the mountains and then the uh, rural areas feel in Hong Kong.

✓ Since I live in a rural area in Hong Kong, I would probably prefer views in rural areas because it's easier for me to see the natural scenery, the mountains, and the rural atmosphere in Hong Kong.

The student wrote 'a rural areas' which mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'areas'; use 'a rural area' or drop 'a'. Also 'probably would prefer to umm, prefer' is repetitive; use 'would probably prefer'. 'Crazier' is misused to mean 'easier' or 'more exciting' — context suggests 'easier' or 'more accessible'; choose appropriate adjective. 'rural areas feel' is incorrect noun phrase; use 'rural atmosphere' or 'rural feel'. Suggestion: ensure articles match noun number and choose appropriate adjectives to convey intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID:1

× So I'm kind of want to explore some new scenes.

✓ So I kind of want to explore some new scenes.

The student used 'I'm kind of want' which incorrectly combines contraction 'I'm' (I am) with base verb 'want'. Use 'I kind of want' or 'I'm kind of wanting' (less common). Suggestion: remove the extra auxiliary or change verb form to maintain correct subject-verb structure. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I prefer the views in my own country, which is Hong Kong, 'cause you know, Hong Kong is a combination between the urban area and the rural area.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country, which is Hong Kong, because Hong Kong is a combination of urban and rural areas.

The student used informal ' 'cause you know' — replace with 'because' for formal clarity. 'A combination between the urban area and the rural area' is wordy and uses singular nouns; use 'a combination of urban and rural areas' for correct preposition and plural nouns. Suggestion: use 'combination of' and match plurality for consistency. Grammar problem type ID:12

× If you want to see something is rural, you're gonna go to Saikong and see the see the harbour and the mountains is really beautiful.

✓ If you want to see something rural, you can go to Sai Kung to see the harbour and the mountains, which are really beautiful.

The phrase 'see something is rural' is incorrect; use 'see something rural' or 'see a rural area'. 'You're gonna go to Saikong' is colloquial; use 'you can go to Sai Kung'. Also 'the mountains is really beautiful' has subject-verb agreement error; 'mountains' requires 'are'. Add 'which are' to link description. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and relative clause structure, and ensure subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID:11

× But if you want to see the urban area, it's very good to travel to Central in Hong Kong.

✓ But if you want to see the urban area, it's a good idea to travel to Central in Hong Kong.

The phrase 'it's very good to travel to Central' is understandable but awkward; 'it's a good idea to travel to Central' is more natural. No strict third-person singular verb error here, but refining keeps correct use of 'it's' (it is). Suggestion: use natural expressions like 'it's a good idea' or 'you should travel to'. Grammar problem type ID:2