Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, avoid filler words and repetition, and use clear past/present tense. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific detail and a reason. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel. For example, on my last trip to the mountains I photographed sunrise views because the light made the landscape very dramatic, and I often share these photos with my family to remember the trip.

提案: Use correct words and grammar, respond directly, and give a clear reason with a linking word. Avoid invented or unclear words; say "prefer" and describe what you like about rural or urban views specifically.

例: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and less crowded, so I can capture wide landscapes and natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and fields at sunset, which feel calmer than busy city streets.

提案: Improve tense consistency and phrasing. Start with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" and avoid awkward phrases like "give me scope."

例: I prefer taking pictures in other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes that remind me of my travels. For example, photos of historic streets in Italy help me remember the trip and I often share them with my family to show what I experienced.

× I, I took some picture.

✓ I took some pictures.

The noun 'picture' should be plural because 'some' indicates more than one; also avoid doubling 'I'. Use 'pictures' as the past action is correctly in past tense. Suggestion: say 'I took some pictures.'

× Please remember me, Remember Me or I had visit.

✓ Please remember me, or remember that I had visited.

The original is unclear and mixes fragments. 'Remember me' is fine alone; to refer to past visits use 'remember that I had visited' or 'remember that I visited'. 'Had visited' is past perfect and is acceptable if contrasting with another past event; otherwise use simple past 'I visited'. Ensure one complete clause at a time.

× So sometimes I also share it with my family and friends and I really enjoy it.

✓ So sometimes I also share them with my family and friends, and I really enjoy it.

The pronoun 'it' should refer correctly to the plural noun 'pictures', so use 'them'. Keep 'it' at the end to refer to the activity ('I really enjoy it').

× I personally pepper rural area especially for the neser because rural area is not crowded places, there is a very fantastic views so I love Blaze.

✓ I personally prefer rural areas, especially for the scenery, because rural areas are not crowded; there are very fantastic views, so I love them.

Multiple errors: 'pepper' should be 'prefer' (wrong verb), 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general meaning, 'for the neser' likely intended 'for the scenery' so correct word and preposition use, 'is not crowded places' mixes singular and plural — change to 'are not crowded', 'there is a very fantastic views' should be 'there are very fantastic views' to match plural subject, and 'I love Blaze' is unclear — likely 'I love them' referring to views. Suggestions: use consistent singular/plural, correct verb choice, and match subject-verb number.

× I really love to take a picture from international countries because it reminds me where I had visit and I it also give me scope to share it with my family and friends.

✓ I really love to take pictures in other countries because they remind me of places I have visited, and they also give me the opportunity to share them with my family and friends.

Use plural 'pictures' and preposition 'in other countries' (not 'from international countries'). 'Reminds me where I had visit' is incorrect: use 'remind me of places I have visited' (present perfect to link past visits to present feeling). 'I it also give me scope' has pronoun and verb agreement errors — use 'they also give me the opportunity' and 'them' to refer to pictures. Overall, ensure correct prepositions, pronouns, and subject-verb agreement.