Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more precise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural, articles), and give one or two specific supporting details connected with a linking word. Limit to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph the mountain and the river in front of my house because their light changes throughout the day. I also like capturing famous landmarks when I travel, since they show local character.

提案: Clarify your preference and use correct place names and linking words. State whether you prefer urban or rural views, give reasons, and avoid unclear words. Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy city architecture and street life. For instance, in cities like London or Brussels I can photograph interesting buildings and people, which gives my photos more energy and variety.

提案: Directly state your preference and avoid unclear words. Use correct grammar (countries, cultures) and give specific examples with linking words to explain why you prefer them. Mention particular places or cultural features briefly.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and styles. For example, when I visited Paris I photographed the streets and cafés; the architecture and fashion were very different from my hometown, which made my photos more interesting.

× Yeah, I like pictures.

✓ Yeah, I like taking pictures.

The original sentence is grammatical but sounds incomplete in context; adding 'taking' clarifies the action. Use the gerund 'taking pictures' to indicate the activity rather than the noun alone.

× When I take pictures, I always take a theme from the mountain or the river running in front of my house, and I also take a pictures of the famous.

✓ When I take pictures, I always choose a theme from the mountain or the river running in front of my house, and I also take pictures of the famous places.

Errors: 'take a theme' is unnatural; use 'choose a theme'. 'take a pictures' has an article-number mismatch: 'a' with plural 'pictures' is incorrect. Also 'the famous' is incomplete; add a noun like 'places'. Fixes: use correct verb collocation, remove incorrect article, and supply the missing noun for clarity.

× I prefer to take a photo of Avanarius since I like Avern architectures like and then London or Brussels kind of things so and I like the people who are in the city.

✓ I prefer to take photos in urban areas since I like Avern architecture and cities like London or Brussels, and I like the people who live in the city.

Problems: 'take a photo of Avanarius' is unclear and likely wrong preposition; use 'in urban areas' to answer the question. 'Avern architectures' is incorrect plural and noun form; use 'Avern architecture'. 'like and then London or Brussels kind of things' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'cities like London or Brussels'. 'people who are in the city' is awkward; use 'people who live in the city'.

× I prefer the abuse of another countries like I must tell them and and blue cells in Paris, I visit there and I took photos of them.

✓ I prefer views in other countries; for example, when I visited Paris I took photos of its blue roofs and streets.

Errors: 'prefer the abuse of another countries' is nonsensical and has article and preposition issues. Use 'views in other countries'. 'I must tell them' is irrelevant. 'blue cells' is likely a wrong word; replace with plausible 'blue roofs and streets'. Use correct past tense 'visited' and 'took' to match the narration.

× It was a very different cultures and the people are also different and, uh, fashions and.

✓ It had very different cultures, and the people and fashions were also different.

Errors: 'It was a very different cultures' mixes singular 'It' with plural 'cultures' and has article problems. Change to 'It had very different cultures' or better 'There were very different cultures'. Ensure verb tense agreement: use past tense 'were' to match 'It was' and maintain plural agreement for 'cultures' and 'fashions'.